I believe I've taken this article about as far as it can go right now and would appreciate if someone could point out any errors or improvements that could be made. Cla68 (talk) 03:38, 18 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Ian Rose
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Very good article, well written/referenced/illustrated. It looks good enough to me for A-class, assuming that's where you're heading next. Just a couple of things:
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First line, "The 2007 United States Air Force nuclear weapons incident was an incident at Minot Air Force Base and Barksdale Air Force Base...". Suggest "The 2007 United States Air Force nuclear weapons incident occurred at Minot Air Force Base and Barksdale Air Force Base..." to avoid repeating "incident". Also in that line you use a linked date range which would look fine to you with US date preferences but for those of us using British style it comes out "29 August – 30, 2007". Not sure what, if any, is the standard solution for that but thought I'd mention it...
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In the last para of Response by the U.S. government we mention "the new Air Combat Command commander, General John Corley" without having said what happened to the old ACC commander, General Keys. Later in Aftermath we find that he retired but was he relieved from ACC over this incident or what? Like to see that noted before we mention General Corley.
Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 07:23, 18 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
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Thank you for the helpful comments. The sources aren't clear on Keys' retirement/replacement situation so I'll need to do more research. Cla68 (talk) 01:09, 19 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
TomStar81
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Verying interesting (if somewhat disturbing), I enjoyed reading it. I concur with Ian Rose that this is good enough for A-class, but I have a few comments first:
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Does the AGM-129 missile have a codename (like tomohawk or harpoon or something along those lines)? If so it would be nice to make mention of that.
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Was General Keys a four star General, or was he a lower ranking General? The article does not say, and I am curious.
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Do you have any idea how long suggested changes resulting from this may go into or stay in effect? I will not hold this one against you, I am merely curious if you have heard anything. TomStar81 (Talk) 07:47, 18 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
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Thank you for the helpful comments and suggestions. I don't believe the AGM-129 has a nickname but I'll check to make sure. Keys was a four-star general, which is just called "General" in the USAF. I'll check the wikilink for the first instance to see if it helps make that clear. Nuclear weapon handling procedures in the USAF are classified, so details and schedules of the changes that come out of this incident may not be publicly available. I don't personally have any special or informal sources of information on this. I'll have to rely on publicly available sources of information and will add any more information to the article if and when it comes out in a verifiable source. Thanks again. Cla68 (talk) 01:16, 19 November 2007 (UTC)[reply]
