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Reviewer: Steelkamp (talk · contribs) 03:03, 22 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
Hello. I will be doing a good article review of this article. I aim to complete my review within the next day or so. Just so you know, I am familiar with the sport.
If you would like to return the favour, I have several good article nominations active right now, which you can find at WP:GAN. Steelkamp (talk) 03:03, 22 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
Well written12:00pm local time– Maybe you could link to Australian Central Standard Time
The Crows led all match and kept...– This is the first mention of the Crows in the article, so readers wouldn't know what they are. I suggest changing the first sentence of that paragraph to
Adelaide, nicknamed the Crows, finished the...Steelkamp (talk) 04:33, 22 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
Leading goalkicker Ashleigh Woodland booted two goals– Is that leading goalkicker for the season or for that match? Steelkamp (talk) 04:33, 22 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
while Tyla Hanks had the job on Phillips.– Sounds like unencyclopedic language. Steelkamp (talk) 04:33, 22 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
Adelaide continued its attacks, but pressure from the Melbourne defence, and resulting inaccurate kicking, led to four more behinds.– Grammar is off here. Steelkamp (talk) 05:13, 24 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
The match commenced with Adelaide's key midfielders Erin Phillips, Anne Hatchard and Ebony Marinoff starting in the centre square.– No mention of Melbourne's players? Steelkamp (talk) 05:13, 24 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
The third quarter opened with Ponter taking a strong mark in the goal square of a long-range kick from Woodland, which she then converted.– This should be reworded. No one unfamiliar with AFL media lingo would know what "converted" means. Steelkamp (talk) 05:13, 24 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
Pearce reinforced the back line, and Tayla Harris was moved into the ruck. Melbourne's Kate Hore kicked a goal after marking a long-range shot from Harris, who needed to lift to avoid becoming the first woman to lose three grand finals against Adelaide playing for three different teams.– I'm not a fan of "needed to lift" considering Australian rules football is a team game and not reliant on the performance of any single player. It's also not clear if this is referring to Harris or Hore. Steelkamp (talk) 05:13, 24 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
Adelaide captain Chelsea Randall kept her quiet– It's not clear who this is referring to. Steelkamp (talk) 05:31, 24 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
The Adelaide defence that also included Sarah Allan also stood firm.– Could be reworded. Steelkamp (talk) 05:31, 24 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
Verifiable with no original researchThe match was broadcast by the Seven Network and simulcast on Foxtel, Kayo Sports, the afl.com.au and womens.afl websites, and on the AFL and AFLW apps. It was also available on radio nationally via ABC Radio, Triple M and SEN.– Source does not show Foxtel or Kayo. Steelkamp (talk) 04:33, 22 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
Adelaide, known as the Crows, finished the 10-game regular season in first position with nine wins and one loss, and the competition's highest percentage, 216.6%. Their only loss came in round six against the Western Bulldogs by 1 point at Norwood Oval, who finished outside the top six and did not qualify for the finals series.– Unsourced. Steelkamp (talk) 04:17, 24 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
Melbourne, known as the Demons, also lost only one match throughout the regular season and claimed nine wins. Their percentage of 186.5% saw them finish in second position and, like Adelaide, they had a bye in the first week of the finals and hosted the winner of the second qualifying final.– Unsourced. Steelkamp (talk) 04:17, 24 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
and put in a late entry for mark of the year.– I don't think you should say this when the sources don't say mark of the year. Steelkamp (talk) 05:31, 24 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
Broad in its coverage Neutral Stable Illustrated, if possibleAlright, good enough to pass now. Steelkamp (talk) 09:28, 24 April 2022 (UTC)Reply
