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Nominator: Magentic Manifestations (talk · contribs) 11:21, 20 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Reviewer: Kiwiz1338 (talk · contribs) 10:29, 21 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
In its current state, it's going to be a failure. I'm willing to hold it if Magentic Manifestations you're ready to fix these issues? Kiwiz1338 (talk) 16:03, 21 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct. | Multiple grammatical errors in the lead and body.
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Uses of current tense in the body of the article, need to be changed to past tense. See MOS:TENSE. The use of "loco" needs to be replaced with "locomotive" as some readers may not understand the term loco. Include the time of the event in the MOS:OPEN |
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1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation. | |
| 2. Verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check: | ||
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2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline. | |
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2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose). | In the crash section, first paragraph, the Train no:12841 is unreferenced. Second paragraph in the crash section Three of the derailed coaches from the Coromandel Express careened into the adjacent track and whip-lashed the tail end of the SMVT Bengaluru–Howrah Express, crossing on the down line at the same time. Two unreserved coaches and the brake van of the SMVT Bengaluru–Howrah Express derailed. is very unreferenced In the victim section, there is no mention of the 33 passengers of Howrah Express in reference Mention of search dog in Emergency response, unreferenced |
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2c. it contains no original research. | |
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2d. it contains no copyright violationsorplagiarism. | Copyvio detector is fine |
| 3. Broad in its coverage: | ||
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3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic. | Yes, although I think something missing should be included. You should mention in the victims section of deceased bodies being given and/or claimed to the wrong familes |
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3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style). | As this was the first time I have heard or read about this collision I believe everything was understandable, even without prior context. |
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4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each. | At first I thought Political columnist Apoorvanand stated that the accident was used as an opportunity to demonise Muslims. In the aftermath of the train crash, posts by various accounts known for spreading Hindutva and BJP propaganda, started circulating messages blaming Muslims for the accident on different social media platforms and WhatsApp groups.was WP:UNDUE. But looking at the sources, even the Odisha Police made a statement regarding social media posts, so I think this aspect deserves a mention. Speaking of that, you could mention Odisha Police's comment on it. This will add WP:BALANCE |
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5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute. | No edit warring but just recently undergone a few major edits |
| 6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio: | ||
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6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content. | Reverse image searching finds no link to any copyrighted source. |
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6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions. | Great diagram in the crash section I must say. Looking at the diagram having read the crash section, I could picture it. I would, however, move this image down, having it next to the text starting At about 19:00. As this is what the diagram is trying to show. I would also remove A_scene_from_interior_part_of_inverted_Coromandel_coach_after_the_tragic_accident.jpg |
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7. Overall assessment. | In its current state, it's going to be a failure. I'm willing to hold it if Magentic Manifestations you're ready to fix these issues? |
