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That he stated that the events of 1915 were a genocide can be (and is, I believe) mentioned further down in the article, but this is not what he wrote and spoke about for 11 years. --[[User:Free smyrnan|Free smyrnan]] 21:50, 19 February 2007 (UTC) |
That he stated that the events of 1915 were a genocide can be (and is, I believe) mentioned further down in the article, but this is not what he wrote and spoke about for 11 years. --[[User:Free smyrnan|Free smyrnan]] 21:50, 19 February 2007 (UTC) |
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Well, I thougt that the last sentence in the intro was approaching the reactions afterward his death in a very one-sided way. So initially I thought of removing it, since it was mentioned later in the article, but I was afraid to be misunderstood. So I added a few sentences about his funeral. If it was for me I'd cut it from the sentece beginning "While Samast...". Not that I am just "another bloody nationalist Turk" trying to cover up for the guys treating him as a hero, but because I don't think how his killer is treated in custody is an intro-worth part in Hrant Dink article.[[User:Ombudsee|Ombudsee]] 23:42, 19 February 2007 (UTC) |
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After doing a few minor cleanup tasks, I'm passing this. Sorry that I don't have anything really constructive to say-- my reccomendation is to take it to WP:FAC. —Disavian (talk/contribs) 23:04, 14 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I am rather a newbie, so any suggestions from more experienced editors? What next, WP:PRorWP:FAC? The only problem I have with FAC is the quality of the prose (needs copyedit, but I have read the article so many times I have developed a blindness to it). Should we go for it? --Free smyrnan 05:22, 15 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
A very informative peer review done by Yannismarou. Thanks to Yanni! I have linked the peer review to the to-do list and I call for all editors to step in and start addressing these items. --Free smyrnan 13:57, 16 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
I have problems with this sentence and I would like to open it up for discussion and consensus:
He was best known for his open and critical approach, in public statements and writings, to the issues of Armenian identity and the official Turkish version of the 1915-17 massacres of Armenians in the Ottoman Empire which he referred to as genocide.
Therefore I propose this sentence instead:
He was best known for his opinions on methods towards a Turkish-Armenian reconciliation and on human and minority rights in Turkey with a special emphasis on the rights of the Armenian minority in Turkey.
That he stated that the events of 1915 were a genocide can be (and is, I believe) mentioned further down in the article, but this is not what he wrote and spoke about for 11 years. --Free smyrnan 21:50, 19 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]
Well, I thougt that the last sentence in the intro was approaching the reactions afterward his death in a very one-sided way. So initially I thought of removing it, since it was mentioned later in the article, but I was afraid to be misunderstood. So I added a few sentences about his funeral. If it was for me I'd cut it from the sentece beginning "While Samast...". Not that I am just "another bloody nationalist Turk" trying to cover up for the guys treating him as a hero, but because I don't think how his killer is treated in custody is an intro-worth part in Hrant Dink article.Ombudsee 23:42, 19 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]