We should take care to discern between the known facts of the case vs sensationalist claims. A court decision of what a jury finds probable isn't the same as known facts and media which cannot discern between the two isn't 100% reliable in such a given instance. [[User:Ranze|Ranze]] ([[User talk:Ranze|talk]]) 08:46, 5 February 2017 (UTC)
We should take care to discern between the known facts of the case vs sensationalist claims. A court decision of what a jury finds probable isn't the same as known facts and media which cannot discern between the two isn't 100% reliable in such a given instance. [[User:Ranze|Ranze]] ([[User talk:Ranze|talk]]) 08:46, 5 February 2017 (UTC)
:On 3 you omitted to mention that you also removed the last phrase "an intoxicated and unconscious" possibly because you wanted to link to an article on [[digital penetration]] which is solely about the consensual act and that plays down that this particular digital penetration was not consensual. On point 2, medical experts can extrapolate from later evidence much as they do when estimating time of death even though they weren't present when the person died. Given the court conviction, you'll need a reliable source to argue that she was conscious or likely conscious at the time of the incident. On 1 because the court case involves her being inebriated not him (being drunk is not a defense for sexual assault in California). His being drunk is described later in the article. --[[User:Erp|Erp]] ([[User talk:Erp|talk]]) 16:01, 5 February 2017 (UTC)
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;In the timeline of this article, the legal definition of the word "rape" in the State of California changed. In the State of California, this change does not apply retroactively. Brock Turner did not penetrate his victim with his penis. By these definitions, as of 2017, Brock Turner is not a rapist.<ref>Salyer, Kirsten, [http://time.com/4362949/stanford-sexual-assault-not-rape/ Why We Can’t Call Brock Turner a 'Rapist'], Time, June 9, 2016 Retrieved: January 20, 2017<ref>
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The article should read, in the second sentence, bring the words "penetrated with his fingers" as one uninterrupted phrase. I am a careless reader (as are many) and I missed that the first few times I scanned the article.
The initial police charge of "rape" was an ephemeral error on their part and was completely disproved once the DNA test came back negative. We should take great pains should be taken at every reference to the term (it occurs 62 times in the article at the moment) to inform the reader that the label is an error, citing the Salyer article in stead of the lower-quality citations.
I propose that every last reference to the word "rape" be removed from the article (including any citations since such is a sign of low quality) as "non-notable" except for
The indictment in the infobox, as a matter of formality. I think that we should note that that the false charges were "Withdrawn by prosecution" in both the Indictment and Verdict lines, since they were withdrawn quickly and long before trial. They were false charges and should never have been filed in the first place. Consider how User:Brad_Patrick bemoans the "overreaching and utter lack of prosecutorial discretion" that contributed to a suicide. The prosecution had the charges and Turner was not going anywhere. In the Turner case, the prosecution could have waited for the DNA results (which would come back in a timely fashion), but in their zealotry, they did not. The current version gives the impression that something complex happened during trial such that the prosecution dropped them.
The change in the law after the fact, again, with substantial emphasis that such a change does not apply retroactively, at least in USA.
I request that people who consider criminal court cases in the USA to be popularity contests to please refrain from closing this edit request. I assert that what matters here is rule of law and such. I request that if you are not familiar and experienced with the notion then either get very, very familiar with it or KEEP OUT.--179.34.144.109 (talk) 23:39, 23 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
As far as I can see the article is very careful about the terminology it uses. I note that though he was not convicted of rape under California law, what he was convicted of is rape for the purpose of the Department of Justice data gathering (Stanford would have had to report it as a rape in its annual report on crime on campus) therefore links to the article on rape is very appropriate. In addition articles may well use the word 'rape' even in cases where it was not 'rape' under the lawcode of the time (e.g., marital rape, rape of captured enemy women, rape of prostitutes. rape of male Homo sapiens) or are you suggesting that the word be wiped from all of those articles also? --Erp (talk) 02:56, 24 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
That federal data is not the law. That is a facile amalgamation of data by federal law enforcement, wishing to cast a wide a net as possible and not be bothered with any such distinctions. There is no way that the word "rape" belongs in this article over 60 times. It is just an attempt at the easy, easy task of lynching him in the court of public opinion. Again, pay attention to the title of article. Of course, if you want to move the page to "Popularity of Brock Turner", then I would say "no problem". In terms of rule of law (and Civics and nation-building and the advancement of Civilization), Turner is trainable and capable of gainful employment in the USA. Maybe he can be a car salesman or something like that. Heck, you got a page on Fingering (sexual act). Why do you not link to it? Let me guess: that is reserved for fingering that you approve of in your immaculate NPOV-ness.--104.197.82.38 (talk) 03:28, 24 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Fingering
See discussion at end of previous section.
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I think you mean "second sentence" which currently reads "Turner was a student athlete at Stanford University on January 18, 2015, when he sexually penetrated an intoxicated and unconscious 22-year-old woman (later called "Emily Doe") with his fingers." This seems completely accurate. The term in the alternative sentence "fingered" is colloquial and unclear (one does not know it is meant in the sexual sense until one goes to the linked page, "fingered" can also mean identified "Brock fingered Emily Doe as drinking") and not a legal term. Also what citation are you offering to support the usage of "fingered" as opposed to "sexually penetrated ... with his fingers"? --Erp (talk) 14:32, 24 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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See previous attempts at a perfect request. Ambiguity concerns in previous section addressed.
The second sentence should be changed from (lengthy citations omitted here for the sake of clarity):
Turner was a student athleteatStanford University on January 18, 2015, when he sexually penetrated an intoxicated and unconscious 22-year-old woman (later called "Emily Doe") with his fingers.
While I respect your service to your country, I assert that you are the pushy one. I have not touched the article itself. I am trying to collaborate and your are trying to chop off all channels of communication and declare victory for yourself via come facile argument about computer technology, young man. Really, this is just a matter of sentence structure clarity and linguistics. In a typical SVO sentence, it is best to finish the job of modifying the verb before proceeding on to the verb object. Or is your argument that "sexually penetrated with his fingers" is not fingering (sexual act)?!? What is your basis for that lost cause? Let me point out that we should not be pointing at all to rape when we have the more specific Rape in the United States. Of course, if we had the page "Rape in California", that would be even better because it is higher specificity. Still, the wikilink to Rape in the United States should be in a "see also" section rather than taking up room in the text.--185.55.65.228 (talk) 17:03, 24 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
I disagree. No one has addressed the discussion at hand. It is not clear that any such consensus has been reached. EvergreenFir: I do not assert a social agenda such as feminism or such. Again, please let us collaborate rather than just attempt to shut each other down the way they used to do at the end of every episode of Survivor (franchise) and so very, very many other TV-based and fiction-based sources of entertainment. Let me admit: I do not fit the mold. I am here to discuss rule of law rather than engage in some sociology-based contest for what? The entertainment of others or flattering others by suggesting that I support their POV social agendas?-- 70.248.28.108 (talk) 20:41, 24 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
I am aware of WP:LEADCITE says. I feel that having 25 citations in the lead is a sign of this article being a low-quality article. This case is closed except for Turner's probation and there has been no recent news about that. If he does get accepted to a school or gets a job, then that should be mentioned in some follow-up section. The victim seems to be proceeding on with her life as a student. This article is supposed to focus on the court case. That can be summed up pretty quickly as opposed to the current state of affairs where lead is flooded with procedural details. At most, the lead should have one sentence on the publicity and one sentence about the stuff that Persky had to go through. Perksy was completely exonerated by the proper authorities of any wrongdoing. If those still determined to pursue a recall on Persky make any further progress, well, then that deserves one more sentence at most if it ever happens. Persky has his own BLP and that kind of stuff belongs almost completely in his BLP. Again, if the page title has any meaning whatsoever, this article is suppose to be first and foremst about THE COURT CASE.--185.55.65.228 (talk) 19:03, 24 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
My reading of the victim impact statement (VIS) is that the defense claimed consent from the victim during trial. We have almost ZERO on the trial proper. We currently present the claim of consent by Turner as occurring after the trail but the VIS suggests that he did so during trial. Can anyone sort that out for me?--70.248.28.108 (talk) 00:13, 25 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Sociological, feminist and academic analysis of case
@Erp: since you reverted I would like to know why you think:
1) we should only mention Doe's intoxication in the lede when we can just as efficiently convey they were both inebriated. Why are we leaving out Brock's intoxication here?
2) why we should state Doe was unconscious at the time of penetration when no medical analysis of her state of consciousness was performed until after penetration had stopped. Any such expressions should describe her state of being when actually examined and not indulge speculation about what it was when no medical experts were present
3) why we should use cluttersome phrase like "sexually penetrated with the fingers" when "digital penetration" is more concise.
We should take care to discern between the known facts of the case vs sensationalist claims. A court decision of what a jury finds probable isn't the same as known facts and media which cannot discern between the two isn't 100% reliable in such a given instance. Ranze (talk) 08:46, 5 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
On 3 you omitted to mention that you also removed the last phrase "an intoxicated and unconscious" possibly because you wanted to link to an article on digital penetration which is solely about the consensual act and that plays down that this particular digital penetration was not consensual. On point 2, medical experts can extrapolate from later evidence much as they do when estimating time of death even though they weren't present when the person died. Given the court conviction, you'll need a reliable source to argue that she was conscious or likely conscious at the time of the incident. On 1 because the court case involves her being inebriated not him (being drunk is not a defense for sexual assault in California). His being drunk is described later in the article. --Erp (talk) 16:01, 5 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]
Not done: Opinion piece by one person. Also saying absolutes like "
Not done Just because you change your IP address doesn't mean that you can still try to push your agenda...also there's no citations or reffs of any kind...TJH2018talk 16:33, 24 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]
