Talk:Aage Bohr/GA1

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Reviewer: Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk · contribs) 12:17, 9 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

Beginning review. Will add comments over the next several days. Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk) 12:24, 9 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

A couple of instances of copyvio need to be addressed in the "Early life" section.

After fixing the above issues, you can re-check this article using Earwig's Copyvio Detector

Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk) 12:58, 9 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

• That source acknowledges that it is a copy of the Wikipedia article on Niels Bohr [which I wrote]. I'm just close paraphrasing myself. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:28, 9 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

OK. Copying from Wikipedia happens a lot. :-) Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk) 21:55, 9 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

A couple of DABs and a dead link that has to be researched...

• Which Department of Scientific and Industrial Research?

    Done Added disambiguation. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:46, 9 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

• There are a lot of William Braggs, some related, some not.

    Done Changed link. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:46, 9 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

• I would imagine that this has been moved: Oral History interview transcript with Aage Bohr 23 & 30 January 1963, American Institute of Physics, Niels Bohr Library and Archives

    Done Switched to archived version. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:46, 9 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

The lede quotes from the Nobel awards page, but I can't figure out Aage Bohr's individual contributions as distinguished from those of Ben Mottelson and James Rainwater from the rather laconic summary. Could you expand the lede just a little so that it can be read apart from the rest of the article? Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk) 22:30, 9 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

•   Done, although I don't think it adds much. Hawkeye7 (talk) 10:43, 10 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

Hans Bohr, Erik Bohr, and Sortedam Gymnasium are, admittedly, significant enough in Denmark to merit their own wiki pages, but for English-language speakers, I feel that this represents overlinking. Even on the Danish Wikipedia, the corresponding articles are hardly more than stubs. Having famous relatives or being a school that a famous person attended are not usually significant to grant notability. Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk) 23:27, 9 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

•  N I disagree. High schools are presumed notable, and one with multiple graduates who have English wikipedia articles is likely to attract a translation. Hawkeye7 (talk) 10:16, 10 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

• It's OK for us to disagree. :-) Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk) 12:22, 10 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

Some awkward or unclear phrases:

• "That fresh eyes had reached this conclusion put Enrico Fermi's concerns to rest." (awkward phrasing)

    Done Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (talk) 10:16, 10 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

• "...with a thesis concerned with some aspects of atomic stopping problems" (what problems?)

  I have no idea. Unless we can find a copy of his unpublished master's thesis, all we have to go on is his statement to that effect. I have linked "atomic stopping problems". Hawkeye7 (talk) 10:16, 10 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

• OK. Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk) 12:22, 10 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

• "By the late 1940s it was known that the properties of atomic nucleus could not be explained..." (Number agreement. "nuclei" versus "nucleus"?)

    Done Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 10:16, 10 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

Stigmatella aurantiaca (talk) 23:42, 9 August 2015 (UTC)Reply