Talk:CEO of public schools

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I like this a lot. It's interesting and will likely generate a lot of interest. Most of your citations are newspaper articles. Can you find any journal articles or books on the topic of Schools CEO? You'll want to see if there are any statistics on the number of CEOs, their pay, and how CEOs differ from traditional superintendents. Also, you write that CEOs are appoint to address inequality. How do you know that? My sense is that CEOs are really about performance and possibly accountability. But I could be wrong. You'll need to find some kind of support for the claim though. You might also upload a photo of some of the CEOs. Also, I'd include a section on "Controversies." What do proponents of CEOs say? What do opponents say? Mcassell04 (talk) 23:28, 11 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

I think this topic is really cool! I had no idea about this particular subject even happening. I don't want to assume you will add more, but I would like to see a little more subject matter in the History section. It's good to know where it started and whatnot, but maybe continue more about if it was a successful operation and if it played a role in expanding the role of CEOs. I like the fact that you have 17 references, that shows that you have done adequate research and found information from multiple sources. I would also like to see how effective this has become in school systems. Are the examples the only schools that are doing this now? If not, maybe provide some numbers for how many schools are doing this now. Overall, I really like this topic, and I look forward to seeing the finished product! Kyle McClain Kent (talk) 15:12, 15 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

HiTwatso19. This looks like an interesting topic. I'd recommend changing the introduction to your draft a bit to bring it more in line with Wikipedia's guidance for introduction sections. Even for short articles you can think about the intro as a quick summary of the important facts about the subject. For an article of this size, you may only need a few sentences. Those should start with a simple declarative sentence identifying the subject, then tersely summarizing the content of the article. Your first sentence works out really well for this actually, so I've taken the liberty of making it the only sentence in the introduction. You should add 1-2 more and see how it reads. Let me know if you need a hand with that or have any questions. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:16, 20 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

You can take a look at the very first paragraph of Ada Lovelace as an example of a great introduction section. The first three sentences establish who she is, what she did and what she is known for. Obviously since that article is much longer, the whole introduction section will be longer as well, but I find it helpful to refer to. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 18:22, 20 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

I agree with Adam. Take a look at the opening paragraph and add links to other articles.Mcassell04 (talk) 00:55, 26 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

In general, this is good substantively. However, there are several issues with the structure and grammar. I suggest revising the sentences "A CEO is different from a superintendent in that the CEO of Schools has complete and total control over every decision made by a school district;[1] the CEO decides what rights, if any, are delegated to his or her district's board of education.[2] A point of controversy, a CEO of Schools often needs no background in education.[3]" To me, they are poorly constructed and awkward to read. In addition the entire controversy section is poorly structured, I advise in rewriting that entire section and avoiding unnecessary and misplaced commas. The inclusion of examples of schools with CEOs is very good and informative. In general, I think this is an interesting contribution. I also recommend, as Professor Cassell pointed out, to look in the literature for academic discussions of this. AustinMcCrea (talk) 00:09, 11 November 2015 (UTC)Reply