Talk:Landing on Long Island/GA1

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Reviewer: AustralianRupert (talk · contribs) 02:41, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

I will review this article for GA over the next couple of days. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 02:41, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

Initial comments/suggestions

Nice work, Hawkeye, I have the following suggestions: AustralianRupert (talk) 07:54, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

• in the lead: "Long Island (Papua New Guinea) was an..." I wonder if the piping should be hidden, and also whether the location of the island should be clarified more. For instance, may be this might work: "Long Island, situated blah blah blah, was an important staging point for Japanese barges..." I would also suggest maybe clarifying the area that the barges were being used, e.g. "important staging point for Japanese barges operating between X and Y", or something similar (suggest adding this to the Background section also)

   Y Added. The piping has been hidden; it was uncovered by an editor when the article ran on the front page as a DYK. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:46, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

• "wiped out by a volcanic eruption..." do we know when roughly (perhaps state the year, if know)?

   Y Uh, well, the Allied Geographic Section report says "in the last 150 years", but I believe that it was the 1660 eruption, which

• PT boat is overlinked in the Landing section

   Y Resolved.

• "and it was feared that the Japanese..." --> "...feared by Allied planners that the Japanese?"

   Y No, by the garrison. Added a bit. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:46, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

• Images: are there any photos of the landing, or forces involved, or even the radar station? If not, it isn't a drama, but it would certainly improve the article if one could be added

  Not that I could find. I'd settle for much less, like a half decent map. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:46, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

  No worries, potentially this one might be a bit less cluttered, although it doesn't specifically label Long Island. File:New guinea.png. AustralianRupert (talk) 22:56, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

• "cut the Japanese supply line, which was by barges moving along the coast..." --> perhaps clarify which coast

   Y Added a bit. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:46, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

• "aircraft coming from Madang...": suggest linking Madang here

  Already linked above. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:46, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

• "difficulty keeping the equipment operational": do we know why? Was it because of the climate?

   Y Yes. Added a bit. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:46, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

• Do we know how long the radar station remained on the island? This source seems to have something on pp. 68-69: [1]

   Y Added that. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:46, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

• I think the Huon Peninsula campaign should be mentioned somewhere in the lead and the body of the article

   Y Done. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 20:46, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

Criteria

• It is reasonably well written.

  a(prose):  b(MoS):  

• It is factually accurate and verifiable.

  a(references):  b(citations to reliable sources):  c(OR):  

• It is broad in its coverage.

  a(major aspects):  b(focused):  

• It follows the neutral point of view policy.

  a(fair representation):  b(all significant views):  

• It is stable.

  No edit wars etc.:  

• Itcontains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.

  a(tagged and captioned):  b(Is illustrated with appropriate images):  c(non-free images have fair use rationales):  dpublic domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:  

• Overall:

  aPass/Fail:  

  Great work as always, Hawkeye. Thanks for your efforts. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 22:56, 5 December 2017 (UTC)Reply