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I have also been looking into elevating some CDPs and unincorporated areas up to GA standards, so I'm also watching closely here. As it stands, I think you should draw inspiration from small-town articles, even if things don't line up perfectly. A surprising amount can be extracted from small-town resources, as I saw when researching Darrington, Washington. SounderBruce05:57, 14 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
This section is extremely short. Even if this CDP was not designated until recently, surely there has to be local history that be incorporated in here.
"and the ZIP Code used by the Postal Service for most of North Potomac, 20878, is also used by Gaithersburg" should be split into its own sentence, separated by a semicolon, or merged in appropriately.
Added "Eventually, some of the farmland was sold. During the Great Depression, some farmers became eager to sell their land because of financial hardship. Wealthy individuals began buying property in the Potomac area as part of their search for land where they could ride horses and hunt. Some farms, such as the 355-acre (144 ha) Maple Spring Farm, continued well into the 20th century. Much of this farm's land was sold in the 1970s and became North Potomac's Dufief subdivision." TwoScars (talk) 22:16, 21 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
I suggest copying the data formatting from another CDP article (generated by bots), since they have far more than what is shown. The 2010 census data should be in its own subsection.
The Asian sentence is awkward, especially since it implies that multiple Korean ethnic groups are significant in the CDP. I would reword it as follows: "while Asian Indians and Koreans also have a significant presence."
This section could be majorly expanded by explaining who provides basic services to North Potomac, such as EMS, policing, fire protection, garbage collection, sewer maintenance, water service, electricity, etc.
The largest employers should also be listed here alongside the sectors, if possible
No list from reliable sources. Montgomery County has a list of all companies with 100 or more employees, but no location. I would have to break Wikipedia rules and conduct OR for each company, then select the largest in North Potomac -- if there are any with 100+ employees. The list does say that Shady Grove Hospital has over 1000 employees. TwoScars (talk) 21:39, 29 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
No need for the Biotech quote, the next sentence makes it self-explanatory
The commute sentence should be rebuilt from scratch to be less guidebook-like:
"North Potomac residents who commute further distances to work typically use Interstate 270 or the Shady Grove station on the Washington Metro system, which serves the region"
Individual bus routes do not need to be listed, even in the footnotes. I suggest using a system map as a better source instead of the WP:CITEOVERKILL.
Footnote dropped. Source is a system map, but it is the current system map that has reduced service because of the COVID-19 virus. The normal map is not available except one route at a time. TwoScars (talk) 16:35, 30 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
" who can earn an associate degree or advance their education": Again, too promotional. Use "offering associate degrees and transfers to other institutions"
Removed sentence that mentions bikers/cyclists. (As info, The Mid-Atlantic Off-Road Enthusiasts do not use the term "cyclists". They are mountain bikers—something different from cyclists that use roads.)
The four-point list of other parks is not well integrated and could be dropped entirely
"630 acres located in the Darnestown CDP on River Road" needs to be rewritten
Changed to: The 630-acre (250 ha) Blockhouse Point Conservation Park is also located along the Potomac River and C&O Canal. TwoScars (talk) 20:27, 1 June 2020 (UTC)Reply
Upon second reading, I don't think this section is necessary at all. It belongs in the county article, especially since these apply to the area as a whole rather than being unique to North Potomac.
Please trim these down or try to incorporate them into the prose. The Census Bureau footnotes are particularly long and not entire necessary for a single CDP, as they should described in a general article.
Census Bureau footnotes were eliminated since they are duplicative, and the information can be found with the citation. TwoScars (talk) 16:46, 15 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
Citations 6, 20, 64, and 65 (among others) do not need a separate publisher, since they share the same name as their respective newspapers
"No Man's Land", "Chabad Wins Property", "Coaches Making Quince Orchard....", and US News "Wooton" all have publisher eliminated from template. TwoScars (talk) 18:31, 15 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
Citation 7 doesn't seem to work. Please use a more specific link
Citations 27 and 43 (Patch) are not from a reliable source
Removed text and citation related to Patch (North Potomac's only newspaper) for Poplar Grove Baptist Church. Replaced Patch in Demographics section (last sentence) with Money Inc. in citation. TwoScars (talk) 19:13, 15 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
Citation 33 (Natural Atlas) is not from a reliable source
Far too many primary sources linking to the county government's website. Using local newspapers would be more appropriate here.
There are no local print newspapers for North Potomac. The North Potomac - Darnestown Patch is "run by professional editors and salespeople", and it appears to be all on-line—that's it. The entire DC region reads the Washington Post and a few get the Wall Street Journal. There is also no local government other than the county. TwoScars (talk) 22:04, 14 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
As mentioned above, this article is lacking an Infrastructure section. I would move the transportation information into it as a subheading and also include subsections for Healthcare and Utilities (per the WP:USCITIES guide).
No mention of public artwork, private arts organizations, or other culture? Surely there has to be something for the area.
Not in North Potomac—only wildlife, parks, and trails—no museums (Travilah has one). Will search for museums nearby later. Hard to compete with Washington DC. TwoScars (talk) 20:58, 22 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
Also, the active peer review request should be closed. I don't believe that articles are allowed to be at PR and GAN at the same time, but can't find the specific rule at this time. SounderBruce09:46, 20 May 2020 (UTC)Reply
Reading through now, the only real comment left is that the image captions are quite lacking. Other than that, I only have a few comments left for the Historic places section that I will post a bit later. SounderBruce06:49, 14 June 2020 (UTC)Reply
I added to the captions. The Historic places section was fun for me to research, and I learned a lot. However, if you think it is too much history, I could make "Historic places" a subsection and have only two paragraphs with only one image. The DuFief Mill was pretty important, but the other sites are interesting but not necessarily essential to North Potomac—maybe one paragraph for DuFief and one paragraph for the other 3 sites. TwoScars (talk) 19:42, 14 June 2020 (UTC)Reply
@TwoScars: Your proposal for a shortened Historic places section would put this over the line. I think we can have this review wrapped up as soon as you do that. SounderBruce07:23, 20 June 2020 (UTC)Reply
I went through and copyedited the Historic places section. I do not see any other issues with the article, so I'm happy to finally pass this one. Sorry about the long time spent with this one! SounderBruce05:53, 25 June 2020 (UTC)Reply
