Talk:Robert F. Travis/GA1

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Reviewer: Auntieruth55 (talk · contribs) 19:19, 21 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

I'll do this in the next couple of days! auntieruth (talk) 19:19, 21 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

Early career

• William Livingston Travis ... you probably don't need his last name.

   Y Removed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:11, 22 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

• in class of 1928 ... in the Class of 1928 or is a class of 1,928.....

   Y Didn't occur to me that it could be read that way. Changed to "115th out of 261 in class of 1928" to make it clearer. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:11, 22 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

• His brother, William, .... ? should be another comma there, right?

   Y In AmEng, no, but added. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:11, 22 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

Post War

• when it commenced take off from Fairfield-Suisun at 2200 ...when it took off? Presumably every one was still on board when it crashed. :( I think that sentence needs a rework. It sounds strange to say commenced.

  I'm not sure what to do here. By "commenced take off", I mean that the plane started to roll down the runway. There is a long list of things the crew have to do. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:11, 22 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

At one read through, I noted a missing comma, but now I cannot find it. Nice article. I can probably find the citation on his descent from guy at Alamo if you want it. auntieruth (talk) 14:04, 22 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

That's okay. I believe it was an error. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:11, 22 March 2017 (UTC)Reply

This article has failed its Good article nomination. This is how the article, as of March 23, 2017, compares against the six good article criteria:

1. Well written?:y

2. Verifiable?:y

3. Broad in coverage?:y

4. Neutral point of view?:y

5. Stable?:y

6. Images?:y

interesting, thanks for the article!

When these issues are addressed, the article can be renominated. If you feel that this review is in error, feel free to have it reassessed. Thank you for your work so far.— auntieruth (talk) 19:06, 23 March 2017 (UTC)Reply