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Overall: I don't think either hooks are that interesting. Can you come up with something else? Perhaps you could mention that they won $500,000, I suppose. BorgQueen (talk) 20:15, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
@BorgQueen: didn't see this notif for some reason. I personally don't find the financials/monetary aspect of these sorts of things interesting at all. I thought ALT1 was kinda conceptually funny, the fact that the team was still so freshly signed when they won the tournament that DZ hadn't even given them player bios on their website yet. Idk. I'll see what I can do, but will be adding the $500,000 win into the actual article as that info is currently not included. Soulbust (talk) 01:44, 21 May 2024 (UTC)
@BorgQueen: Does the above satisfy your concerns? If not, are there any other aspects that you think Soulbust can create a hook from? Z1720 (talk) 00:31, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
@Z1720: I'd like another reviewer to take a look. BorgQueen (talk) 00:49, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
Per the above request. Z1720 (talk) 00:51, 10 June 2024 (UTC)
What about
ALT2: ... that when DarkZero contracted Xynew, his teammates highlighted his "communication skills and game brain", which they deemed unusual for a controller player?
(Hook) review still needed, I just suggested another hook. And maybe the hook could be shortened a bit. As a side note, I don't like the phrase "Covid-19 scare", as it's not clear to me that he tested positive – I read it as if there had been some sort of "panic" around him. (But maybe that's my non-native English misreading it.) –LordPeterII (talk) 13:24, 13 June 2024 (UTC)
Used "scare" as it is what the Dot Esports source referred to it as. If I recall correctly, in my research of sourcing for the article, I came across an interview of the player where he mentions that he received multiple tests for it: one positive, one negative, and as a result of that had to miss playing. Soulbust (talk) 04:04, 14 June 2024 (UTC)
@Soulbust: ALT2 checks out, though should probably be unpiped for context. I'm happy-ish with scare, however it might be worth adding your multiple tests explanation to the article. "the organization has not fielded a Valorant roster since" is unsourced and could date, so I recommend yeeting at least that clause, possibly the whole sentence.--Launchballer 11:39, 24 June 2024 (UTC)
@Launchballer: Fixed the COVID-19 info to include multiple test info, removed "scare" from its wording. Also yes the Valorant info did date. Another editor added info of their very recent re-entrance into the Valorant scene, so I just right now removed the "not fielded since" part. Soulbust (talk) 19:02, 24 June 2024 (UTC)
Fine by me. Let's roll.--Launchballer 13:34, 25 June 2024 (UTC)
Full review needed now that QPQ has been submitted. BlueMoonset (talk) 04:56, 15 May 2024 (UTC)
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I don't think either hooks are that interesting. Can you come up with something else? Perhaps you could mention that they won $500,000, I suppose. BorgQueen (talk) 20:15, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
@Soulbust: ALT2 checks out, though should probably be unpiped for context. I'm happy-ish with scare, however it might be worth adding your multiple tests explanation to the article. "the organization has not fielded a Valorant roster since" is unsourced and could date, so I recommend yeeting at least that clause, possibly the whole sentence.--Launchballer 11:39, 24 June 2024 (UTC)
Fine by me. Let's roll.--Launchballer 13:34, 25 June 2024 (UTC)