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Phillip Davey

• ... that Phillip Davey (pictured) was awarded the Victoria Cross for killing an eight man machine gun team, which "saved his platoon from annihilation"...? Source: National Archives of Australia: B2455, DAVEY P p. 22

• Comment: My second DYK, hopefully it is up to standard.

Improved to Good Article status by Peacemaker67 (talk). Self-nominated at 23:11, 23 July 2017 (UTC).

• Article well written (as always). Promoted to GA within the requisite timeframe. Long enough. Well referenced and neutrally written. Earwig'g tool only flags the citation, reproduced verbatim here and elsewhere. Hook is interesting, and supported by the source. QPQ not necessary (only one previous DYK, Peacemaker? How did you manage that, with 30 FAs?) Two quibbles only: one, (optional) that the VC image combined with the quotes makes the page structure look odd, and two (necessary) I don't think we should be using the citation text in the hook; or if we do, it should be within quotation marks. Regards, Vanamonde (talk) 04:51, 26 July 2017 (UTC)

• I'm a late adopter... As far as the rest, I know the page structure thingo is a bit odd, but I think we can live with it; and we're not actually quoting the text of the citation verbatim in the hook, it is more of a paraphrase of the whole thing, so I'm not sure what you're getting at with that bit. Can you elaborate? Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:10, 26 July 2017 (UTC)

• Mostly the "saving the platoon from annihilation" which is uncomfortable close to "saved his platoon from annihilation" in the citation. If you want that phrasing, why not quote it? Vanamonde (talk) 05:17, 26 July 2017 (UTC)

• OK I get it now, I've quoted it with the slight wording change. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:26, 26 July 2017 (UTC)

• Thanks. GTG. Vanamonde (talk) 05:34, 26 July 2017 (UTC)

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