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Long time no see Aoba. Still busy with reviews? I have been nominating Vinland Saga (manga) articles to GA last year and in the present due to my interest over it, slavery storyline, and the themes they use. However, Vinland Saga (TV series) ended on nomination since March and nobody can give a look. Another user in charge of DYKs toned down some parts to fix the prose and remove quotes. If possible, could you review the TV series? I also plan nominate Heavenly Delusion in the future due to my interest in its story and gender themes but I'll first have it copyedited. Cheers. Tintor2 (talk) 19:08, 11 July 2024 (UTC)Reply
@Tintor2: Congratulations on the GA. For reference, I am looking at this version of the article, and just to be clear, I am only doing a quick scan-through and not anything thorough. I can understand your concern about the "Reception" as it does appear overly long to me. This section should be an overview of the response to the character. I would look through WP:RECEPTION, but I would look for common themes in the coverage and avoid trivial or excessive detail. This can be difficult to balance as the character first appears in the early 1990s, but it is possible. It would be best to stick to higher quality sources, and Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Sources is a helpful resource for video game references. You could also experiment around breaking this section off into smaller subsections.
The second paragraph is quite long and devoted to a single source. This source should be better integrated into the prose and in my opinion, there is an undue weight given to it. I have a similar concern with the way that the Rosângela Fachel de Medeiros is included in the prose. I also notice several other issues with the prose. For instance, this part should be revised, The book 100 Greatest Video Game Franchises compared
, as a book does not compare things. I would revise this part, Anthony Hubeny from Stockholm University
, to include a better descriptor as the university does not provide any real context for readers. I also notice some reference issues. For instance, this source has an author credited, but that is not represented in the prose or citation, and the Japanese citations would need to include English translations for their titles.
I hope that this is helpful. Again, to be 100% clear, I have not done a thorough read-through of the article, and it may be helpful to reach out to other editors. And again, congratulations for the GA and for taking on such a big, well-known character. Aoba47 (talk) 21:47, 21 July 2024 (UTC)Reply