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The B11/80 has been built to 2011 LMP2 regulations, including the fin on the engine cover, while the B08/80 is a car that conforms to an older set of regulations and (with certain modifications) is now basically a LMP1 car. Level 5's closed-top cars are running the fin, therefore aren't they deemed to be B11/80 spec? They are 2011-built cars from what I could gather. Also, to add ambiguity to this, the ACO result sheets only list the car as a Lola Coupe-HPD. Vikirad (talk) 19:59, 13 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
My 2c: shouldn't there be some facts about the Lotus/Jetalliance entries? (I am not affiliated with Lotus, just did not see any facts mentioned whereas most GTE Pro entries are covered). — Preceding unsigned comment added by Robert van Engelen (talk • contribs) 14:16, 15 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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Reviewer: Adog (talk · contribs) 21:46, 17 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
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I will also take on this one, as I will already be doing Talk:2017 24 Hours of Le Mans/GA1 (I will already be reading policy/guidelines for this one and other articles for research). This review, I will have done either Friday, August 18 or Saturday, August 19. Start revving your engines! Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:46, 17 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Hello once again. As with the previous review, the following are suggestions during my first skim through of the article for grammar and sentence structure fixes. If you do not happen to agree with the suggestions, or believe they are improper or not appropriate for the text, feel free to disregard them with a comment:
It was the third round of the 2011 Intercontinental Le Mans Cup, and the race's 79th edition ...Comma might not be needed here as these are connected thoughts.
An Audi R18 TDI—driven by Marcel Fässler, André Lotterer, and Benoît Tréluyer—started from the pole position, after Tréluyer set the fastest lap ...same as the previous comment. I would remove the comma after "position".
and?
The Greaves Motorsport team of Tom Kimber-Smith, Olivier Lombard, and Karim Ojjeh won the Le Mans Prototype 2 (LMP2) category, after leading for the ...As per for the first two comments, the comma after "category".
Audi's victory moved them closer to Peugeot in the LMP1 Manufacturers' Cup while Corvette's class victory ...Opposite here for the commas. I would add the comma after "Cup" for a needed pause.
... 11 more than second-placed Ferrari, and 14 more than third-place CorvetteComma removal here as they are not independent clauses being connected here (NIC).
... followed by BMW Motorsport, with 26 points.NIC here, removal of comma.
The ACO reduced fuel capacity for both petrol and diesel ..."both" may be an extra word to delete here.
This was done to avoid multiple calendar clashes with several racing series ...Several other racing series?
one-year-old.
Automatic entries
... they were permitted to change their cars from the previous year to the next ..."were permitted to" to "could"?
. Automatic invitations in the two GTE categories could be swapped between the two based on the driver line-ups chosen by those teamsmight read better without "between the two".
Entry list and reserves
Consequently, the No. 44 Extrême Limite AM Paris Norma MP200P-Judd BMW car was promoted ...it might be worth mentioning here initially who or what governance body did the promoting.
... the test session was reintroduced to Le Mans for the first time since 2008, to allow manufacturers and teams to develop new technologies on their carsRemove comma after 2008 as NIC.
Audi and Peugeot's drivers ...
Despite a dislodged power steering hose, Jan Magnussen's third-place No. 74 Corvette was the fastest non-BMW car.
... struck the barrier exiting the Porsche Curves and damaged the car's front-left suspension and radiator, just before mid-pointRemove comma, NIC.
At approximately 195 km/h (121 mph) and at 9.4 G ...I would remove the word "at" as it may be extra.
Signatech's second-session lap did not improve on Ayari's lap; and Ayari thus secured the LMP2 pole position.The semi-colon here could be a comma.
... as the No. 56 BMW fell to third after not being able to partake in the session, following Priaulx's second-session accidentRemoval of comma as it is NIC.
Qualifying results
Taking a break here for the moment or the night. I will continue thereafter. Adog (Talk・Cont) 05:12, 20 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Start to early evening
Aston Martin Racing lost both of its LMP1-class AMR Ones during the first hour when Darren Turner beached the No. 009 car ...I would change the wording here from "beached" to another synonym per the last review, as a reader might interpret it differently.
... striking the outside tyre wall at high speed, through a gap designed allow cars ...
... reducing the amount of available downforce.for clarity.
Davidson took the lead in the No. 7 Porsche from Fässler's No. 2 Audi, since his car could go longer between pit stopsand
Davidson's No. 7 Peugeot and Fässler's No. 2 Audi exchanged the race lead during the sixth hour, until Fässler was able to establish a minute's lead over the rest of the field.
LMP2 became a duel for first between Prémat and, later, Kraihamer's Oreca and Danny Watts' Strakka car, which was gaining on the OrecaHere I would consider changing "duel" to "contest" as it involved more than one set of duels.
Night to dawn
Gené fell back from Lotterer in the duel for the overall lead; and the No. 7 Peugeot was put under pressure by Rockenfeller's No. 1 Audi, ...Possibly change the semi-colon the a comma.
... causing an oil leak that Lynn repaired before the car's clutch burned out.
Watts moved the Strakka LMP2 car to second in category ...Possible missing word "the" before "category".
Russo lost control of the third-place PeCom car in the Porsche Curves, when it suddenly drove right into the barrierComma might not be needed here, NIC.
... a front nose cone change during pit stop fixed the problem.Possible missing word "a" or "the" before "pit".
Jean-Christophe Boullion substantially damaged the front of the No. 13 Rebellion in an accident at the Porsche Curves but he was unhurt.Add a comma before "but".
... but lost the lead when Davidson overtook him on the inside entering Indianapolis corner.Two things here, comma before "entering" and missing word "the" before "Indianapolis".
... and Christophe Bouchut's No. 33 Level 5 Motorsports entry to third in category.Possible missing word "the" before "category".
Morning to finish
front end
... requiring him to temporarily relinquish the LMGTE Am lead to Gabriele Gardel's No. 50 Larbre, when Neiman entered the garage with liquids leaking from the car's rear.I would remove the comma after "Larbre" per as NIC.
he Corvette and Porsche were both forced to retire due to the accident;Change semi-colon to comma here.
refuellingif British variant.
Audi instructed Tréluyer to slow and not put another lap on DavidsonPossible missing word "down" before "and".
Lotterer replaced Tréluyer during a routine pit stop before another Peugeot slowed the No. 2 Audi, this time by Montagny's No. 8 entry ...
Rain returned to the track during the 22nd hour, which caused some cars to be caught in the changing weather condition.or something of the like.
... and the No. 2 Audi was the first to finish, after 355 laps ...I would remove the comma here, NIC.
Greaves was undaunted for the final 137 laps in LMP2; and drivers Kimber-Smith, Lombard, and Ojjeh claimed their first class wins as well as Nissan's first since 2000.I would start a new sentence where the semi-colon is.
Due to overnight car vibrations, the No. 8 Peugeot, driven by the headache-affected and visually impaired Minassian, finished two laps behind in third place.
He also said he did not deliberately collide with Lotterer and that the closed-cockpit Peugeot allowed him only to observe the latter whilst braking.
McNish was advised not to travel, so he could recover from body traumaPossible missing word "that" after "so".
Audi team principal Wolfgang Ullrich said that the closed-cockpit vehicle design did not provide as wide a view as from an open-cockpit car but denied that visibility-related issues caused the team's two major race accidents.
Class winners are marked in bold. Cars failing to complete 70 per cent of winner's distance (249 laps) are marked as Not Classified (NC)Possible missing word "the" before "winner's".
The article looks pretty good on the skim through. Checks to grammar/sentence structure. I will do a full read through now. Adog (Talk・Cont) 01:53, 21 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
On 24 April ...
silver or bronze-rated
On 24 April ...
The first of three two-hour qualifying sessions ...should have a comma between "three" and "two-hour". Same sentence, June 8 nightto
8 June night.
In the third session, Dumas, in the No. 1 Audi, bettered the No. 2 car's provisional pole lap ..."bested" instead of "bettered"?
Rockenfeller's car was sent spearing left into the Armco barrier at high speed, destroying the Audi and around 20 metres (66 ft) of barrier, with the car recrossing the road and scattering much debris on itI would put a semi-colon and delete "and" in the latter half of the sentence.
@EnthusiastWorld37: Apologies for the repetition in the review phrasing and the slight delay from when I stated I would finish the review. Hopefully, it is not a bore to go over or too poignant. Usually, when I see repeating themes for longer articles, I try to copy + paste or to keep concise phrasing to better simplify the problem to be fixed. :) At this point (depending on if you are on Wiki), I have pretty much finished the suggestion/fixes part of the review besides the spot checks to come and the full report. I will post the spot checks shortly within the hour, and it will be below this sentence if there are any issues. Ping is for you to jump-start if you are feeling like it! Adog (Talk・Cont) 03:33, 21 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
The article is well written, with grammar and sentence structure fixes highlighted above to fix. The article follows a general manual of style layout consistent with the general race car series. The article's reference layout is good for the most part with some concerns above. The article cites a variety of interesting and informing reliable sources on the race subject (between this review and the last, wow there is a lot of play-by-play articles). In terms of spot checks, the article has some issues highlighted above was smooth sailing on this one with both figures and passages checked. In terms of Earwig here, it does highlight two sources fully because of the table's contents of the race's results. I think that is unavoidable so I will pass on that. The rest of the copyright/plagiarism/close paraphrasing are good with quotes highlighted only. Adog (Talk・Cont) 04:51, 21 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
The article covers the topic in both a broad and focused stance. The contents are not overtly one way or the other, just right. The article is neutral towards the subject with fair perspectives. Adog (Talk・Cont) 03:33, 21 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
The article has images that are relevant to the content. The paperwork for the images seems proper, no complaints. The article is stable without any ongoing or active edit conflicts. Adog (Talk・Cont) 01:53, 21 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
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