Problem lies with the reference formatting. Sometimes publishers are being mentioned and sometimes not. Like for Allmusic, Rovi Corporation hasnot been mentioned as the publisher.
Placing the article on-hold for seven days. A well-written article and impressive from biography point of view. However, the only issue lies with the prose sometimes not flowing well as I have pointed out below. Please update it and let me know.
as well as lead songwriter and producer of her debut album. Age Ain't Nothing But a Number sold two million copies in the United States and was certified double Platinum by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA). Change it to as well as lead songwriter and producer of her debut album Age Ain't Nothing But a Number. The album sold two million copies in the United States and was certified double Platinum by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA). That way it is clear what the title of the debut album is.
The word radio airplay. Correct the wikilink to Airplay. And radio airplay doesnot mean anything. It is either airplay or radioplay. Chose any one of them.
Wikilink Billboard since this one will lead to the magazine article.
Do you mean change [[Billboard Hot 100|''Billboard'' Hot 100]] to ''[[Billboard (magazine)|Billboard]]'' [[Billboard Hot 100|Hot 100]]? I personally feel it's more relevant to link to the chart alone, as opposed to the magazine and the chart. — Σxplicit05:26, 9 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Nevermind, I fixed it. What I meant was the second mention of the word Billboard in the line "making Aaliyah the first artist in Billboard history to achieve this feat". --Legolas(talk2me)06:25, 9 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
artist and producer R. Kelly.[9] He became Aaliyah's mentor --> combine for a single flow and undisambiguate --> artist and producer R. Kelly, who became Aaliyah's mentor
as well as lead songwriter and producer of the album.[12][13] They began recording her debut album, Age Ain't Nothing But a Number, when she was 14.[11] you can totally combine these stub sentences --> as well as lead songwriter and producer of her debut album Age Ain't Nothing But a Number, when she was 14.[11]
I've reworded it to Hankerson later introduced her to recording artist and producer R. Kelly, who became Aaliyah's mentor, as well as lead songwriter and producer of the album, which was recorded when she was 14. — Σxplicit05:26, 9 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Vibe magazine later revealed a marriage certificate that listed the couple, where they were allegedly --> Vibe magazine later revealed a marriage certificate that listed the couple as allegedly
The song was nominated for an Academy Award --> Problem with this sentence is, it gives the impression that Aaliyah was nominated for the song which is not true. Singers are not nominated for the Oscar, but songwriters and producers. If you can, mention their name and that Aaliyah performed the song at the award ceremony.
Problem again. The new sentence creates the impression that 1998 Academy Awards ceremony was nominated for Academy Award. Here's a thought, change it to something like "Songwriters XXX and XXX received an Academy award nomination in 1998 for Best Original score. Aaliyah performed the song at the official ceremony and was the youngest artist to perform at the Academy awards." --Legolas(talk2me)06:25, 9 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
I'm not too sure of the wording. Bothsources say the song was nominated, but it doesn't necessarily say Aaliyah received a nomination for the song. I'm no English major, but I think the original The song was nominated for an Academy Award… seems more fit. What are your thoughts? — Σxplicit06:37, 9 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
The video for the song earned Aaliyah Best Female Video and Best Video from a Film at the 2000 MTV Video Music Awards. --> The music video won the Best Female Video and Best Video from a Film awards, at the 2000 MTV Video Music Awards.
It resulted in the aircraft being well beyond the standard weight and balance tolerance provided by Cessna --> Therefore, the aircraft exceeded the standard weight and balance tolerance limit provided by Cessna
Ultimate Aaliyah is a three disc set which comprises a greatest hits audio CD, a second audio CD which includes music from the Romeo Must Die soundtrack and songs by other artists on which Aaliyah is featured, and a DVD.[68] --> Please try chopping it up.
I just summarized the contents into Ultimate Aaliyah is a three disc set, which included a greatest hits audio CD and a DVD.