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Nominator: Reidgreg (talk · contribs) 18:34, 8 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Reviewer: Grnrchst (talk · contribs) 10:22, 13 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Hello! Thank you so much for nominating this for Women in Green's edit-a-thon! Dworkin looks like a fascinating and inspirational person, so I'm more than happy to take this article on for review. --Grnrchst (talk) 10:22, 13 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"Dworkin had served as the president of [...]"When? Without a timeframe, "had served" reads strange.
"Thus,"Cut this, just start with "There were".
"homey and welcoming"Think just "welcoming" would be fine, not need for "homey" too.
a hospital that would not only cater to the linguistic and dietary needs of reluctant Jewish immigrants ... but also employ Jewish doctors and nurses who were denied learning opportunities and privileges at other hospitals. I didn't find "longer visiting hours" so took that out, as it's implied by bikur cholim.
"Primarily those separated by the Russian Civil War (1917–1923) when several Eastern European states sought to reassert their sovereignty following the collapse of the Russian Empire."Source? Are we certain that this is the war that Atanassova is talking about or is this your original interpretation? Because when I see "the war" mentioned in such contexts, my mind usually jumps to World War I. And given the agency was established in 1917, the Russian Civil War wouldn't even have been going on at the time of its founding (it was ignited only in November and didn't really get going until early 1918).
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