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Talk:HMSAS Bloemfontein

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:05, 18 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Will do this shortly. JAGUAR  17:05, 18 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

• "built for the Royal Navy (RN)" - does the abbreviation need to be here if it's not used in the article? I wouldn't have thought it needed to be used at all
• "The ship was equipped with a Type 271 surface-search radar" - might sound better with an extra 'also': The ship was also equipped with a Type 271 surface-search radar. Feel free to ignore
• "until the shore-based training establishment then under construction was completed" - is this the same thing as a stone frigate? I learnt that term when I was writing Portsmouth, and was tempted for a while to bring HMS Vernon (shore establishment) to GA status!
  • I wish you would! I have some secondary data on a few of the major stone frigates, but nowhere enough to even consider bringing them up to even a B-class. Added a link.
• "and did so until she was laid up in 1947 at Devonport Royal Dockyard" - link laid up here
  • Linked in the lede.
• "Rosamund was purchased by the South African Navy later that year" - South African Navy is never actually linked in this article
  • Reworked the lede a little to fix this.
• No dead links
• No DAB links

Looking good, I couldn't find many issues with this one as it's well written and compact. Will leave on hold until all are clarified! JAGUAR  17:18, 18 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. I trust everything is to your satisfaction.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:29, 18 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for addressing them so quickly! By all means this is good to go. I did have a couple of history books on Portsmouth which did extensively cover HMS Vernon but unfortunately I sent them back to the WMF only a few days ago! I think I still might have enough information to write it though, but we'll see. JAGUAR  22:19, 18 November 2016 (UTC)[reply]