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"Hair straighteners won't damage hair unless used with protective thermal spray"
or should it be hair straighteners will damage hair unless used with protective spray?
"Nevertheless, many African-American women still continue to straighten their hair claiming it is an aesthetic choice, however, many African American women do continue to straighten their hair due to the fact that they feel, because of interlized opperession and the idea that their natural hair is wrong, or "nappy-looking" straighten their hair to fit as best as possible European women's hair, as said in the 2009 movie, Good Hair" directed by Chris Rock."
What kind of sentence is that? I don't even know how to begin to fix it.
I'm not sure how to rephrase it. Chris Rock made a documentary called "Good Hair" which is very relevant to this article. It's about hair straightening, and the fact that black women have internalized European standards of beauty. Again, I don't think I'm the best person to fix this article, but someone should. It's an important topic. I know, it's about hair and beauty, it's girly, therefore trivial, right? But it's something that affects the lives of millions of people. It's also a billion dollar industry. Rosekelleher (talk) 02:05, 17 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I'm just a passer by, not a regular editor (hence the usage of an IP address rather than a username, but even I think that the paragraph "Straight Hair African American Women" needs to be looked at. I mean, what is that? There's no references, the paragraph is poorly structured, grammar is either non-existant or used inappropriately, and there is a lack of correct spelling. Not to mention the usage of the word "apron" rather than "upon". I know that this is not the fault of regular editors on Wikipedia, but I urge you that something be done about this paragraph. For lack of a better phrasing, it's just wrong.
This article could do with expansion, in particular in relation to hair straightening by African American women, a topic covered in depth by some excellent sources. Here is just a small number of them, many more could be added:
This article contradicts itself by a large margin on when hair straightening practices began (I would assume the practice goes further back than 1900, too).