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Hello! I'm Pbritti, an editor with a content background of primarily Christianity and architectural subjects. SafariScribe, your article looks promising considering the breadth of sourcing; I hope to work with you to improve it. I noticed that this would only be your second GA, so I want to offer whatever support I can! Please ping me here or on my talk page as necessary! Best, ~ Pbritti (talk) 19:42, 15 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The following comments are from my initial read of the article and are by no means comprehensive. Some comments are more directly related to the GA criteria than others, but each will pertain to an improve I believe should be made to the article. More in-depth reviewing will follow. ~ Pbritti (talk) 19:43, 15 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Image looks clear of copyright issues. It's of strong enough quality to adequately illustrate the subject.
The lead sentence seems to overemphasize one achievement. I would encourage emphasizing the works that have drawn praise/commercial success in the first sentence, followed by a sentence indicating the relevant awards and achievements.
I will trim it
The date of Cane River's release (2001) should be mentioned in the lead
Done
Comma after Red River in the lead. A comma should precede Citizens Creek in the same sentence.
Done
My understanding is that there ought to be a comma after Berkeley, California and Castro Valley, California in the first paragraph of the biography section
Tademy bagged a degree in psychology is too informal (and can mean contradictory things, as I've heard bagged used in a variety of ways)
Changed to "had". More precise!
The s in In 1992, She should not be capitalized
Oh my bad. Done
Hold on—she was the vice president of Sun Microsystems? This requires elaboration, as that's a major corporation. At the minimum, we need to scrounge up additional details of her time at the company.
I'll do the same researching now
Cane River should be linked on first mention in the body and unlinked elsewhere
Done
non fiction novel is a contradictory statement. Do you mean historical fiction? Additionally, non-fiction takes a hyphen or can be spelt as nonfiction.
According to her, She Again, s shouldn't be capitalized
Done: thanks!
The Encyclopedia.com reference is actually scraped from an edition of Contemporary Black Biography (I'm searching to determine which specific edition). You should cite the book and use the via= parameter to indicate accessibility through Encyclopedia.com
Overall initial impression: There are some substantial issues. The most pressing is that I think that depth of coverage present in this article doesn't adequately cover the subject according to GA criteria standards. Additionally, there are some fairly substantial MOS issues; I'm prone to typos and I understand how frustrating they can be, so please bear with me as we work together to resolve them. In general, I think we could make a GA here, but we need to fairly substantially expand the article. ~ Pbritti (talk) 20:08, 15 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Pbritti, thanks again. Who am I not to bear anything? This was one of my first GANs. I tried once to withdraw it, but on a second thought, Wikipedia isn't perfect either. As I bear with you, know that there can be minor mistakes, and I want you to take your time too and do your best as you always have done per you contributions. I also agree that the article is short; in regards too, there are short GAs. For me, it can reach GA status when we keep working on it. Thanks for picking this up and don't be worried. If there is any error, drop it, and I'll work on it. Regards! — Safari ScribeEdits!Talk!20:40, 15 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@SafariScribe: This reply does you immense credit! Thank you for your patience and openness to cooperation. By the way, I noticed you're somewhat new to editing on this account more generally. All I can say is that I'm impressed with your work thus far! Keep it up! I'll be on more soon with additional comments and suggestions. ~ Pbritti (talk) 20:43, 15 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Pbritti, Yes, I am relatively a new editor though I read Wikipedia often. In a nutshell, looking my upper comment, there are some errors though not noticable. These are typical errors one observes amidst typing fast. It's well! — Safari ScribeEdits!Talk!20:47, 15 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The following is a list of content expansions required for this article to attain GA status through comprehensive coverage. I must admit that the purpose of this list is to indicate that this article is unlikely to pass as a GA at this time but that it can absolutely stand at GAN again. If you believe that you can accomplish the expansion by the end of this week (let's say 00:00 on 21 April for the sake of establishing a deadline), then please make that effort and I'll perform a review then.
Lead: The lead needs to be rewritten to better indicate the nature of Tademy's writing and what literary impact they had. Additionally, some detail on her prior career (the first 50 years of her life) and her decision to become an author.
Biography: This section requires expansion. The portion on her early life and education is sufficient, but her business career needs substantial elaboration.
Career: This section is substantially lacking in coverage. Awards and honors that helped propel her work go unmentioned despite being referenced in the lead. Her debut novel is described in a manner (non-fiction novel) that does not appear in the source that is cited at the end of the sentence. There are a couple reviews of the book referenced, but these are mostly quotes with limited encyclopedic value to Tademy, containing details more relevant to the article on the book itself. The literary impact of the book is not addressed. Given that she has written other books, it's unusual that these are not more thoroughly mentioned. This section should be expanded to about double its size with new content. Manual of Style issues are fairly prevalent in this section.
Selected writings: The list should aim to include every book she has written and any important essays/short stories (if there are any). If this is a complete list, it should be renamed as "Writings". This section should be relocated to above the references
Awards and honors: This section does not appear to be an exhaustive list of every major award or honor she has received. It is also worth expanding on what these honors entail and ensuring that each honor's date of issuance is included.
Personal life: This section is woefully short. Considering the considerable number of interviews with her available online, this section could be at least a couple full paragraphs long.
References: Some of these references are to books but lack page numbers. If you have access to these sources, I request that you email them (at least relevant page numbers) to me. If they exist in digital form, they should be linked. Other citations are not full built out and should have additional parameters filled.
Pbritti, I have edited the article to standard. I will now allow you review the article. The sources have their Google book links for verification, while some are PDFs. I'll try to expand more whenever you mention so. Thanks for picking this up and have a wonderful day. Thanks! — Safari ScribeEdits!Talk!22:54, 20 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
If it's still not up to standard, though I know it needs more attribution. Let me know or leave the review to Monday. This is an appeal. Thanks and can be verified by my edits so far. Thanks. — Safari ScribeEdits!Talk!23:28, 20 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
This article has come a long way over the last week. Unfortunately, though, it retains a great number of minor factual issues, major MOS issues, and a deficiency in sourcing corresponding with content. I encourage you to resubmit this article to GAN after some more cleaning has been done. Do not be discouraged, as you have clearly demonstrated an exceptional ability to embrace criticism and improve Wikipedia. If you resubmit this for review, I'd love to look at it again. Best, ~ Pbritti (talk) 15:51, 21 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
Done
