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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Kaityzoz. Peer reviewers: Carrot47, Gari.olsson, TurinHorse2011, Ef674.
Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignmentbyPrimeBOT (talk) 01:38, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Hello, I really enjoy reading your article. I feel like I know much more about Nina in a clear and detailed way. I particulary enjoy the way you analyze and present her relationships to Eisenstein. Your point of view was fair and objective. I find the organisation of the page quite adequate. I am guessing you didn't find any information concerning her childhood ? or even before 1917 ? I reckon that if even her birth date seems unknown, it must be inexistent. But I kind of missed those kind of informations, especially because I feel like it would be interesting to know in which kind of environnement she grew up to be so involved in political actions...
My last comment would be on the language - I understand the struggle, english not being my first language - but with such a well-done research, I feel some sentences corrections could really enhance your good work. Some examples of sentences : "She is perhaps most widely recognized for writing" - cut the perhaps ? ; "She engaged in work" "she also functioned as" not sure how to phrase that though... (I can list them if you want/need it)
Also I would point out one repetition that would not be necessay in "While Eisenstein was a child during the events of 1905, Agadzhanova, ten years his senior, had participated in uprisings in Ekaterinodar as a teenager and joined the Bolsheviks in 1907" I would cut that last part, probably because we know that already at this point.
Small details as you can see... I really enjoy reading it ! Well done — Preceding unsigned comment added by Gari.olsson (talk • contribs) 22:02, 15 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
This review made me hyper-aware of how much work I need to do on mine. It was thorough, compelling and included all types of salient information that made continuing to read it easy and enjoyable. My only suggestion is that you include a little bit of information about her death, if possible. Oh and maybe a little more information about what she was specifically doing during the revolution though that might not be as relevant, I'm just fascinated with the subject matter. TurinHorse2011 (talk) 22:01, 17 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Hi! I just finished reading your article and I have to say it is fantastic. All of your information is clear, detailed and presented in a very organized way. As I was reading I was trying to find something to critique and it kind of seems impossible. Since I have to say at least one thing, I would suggest maybe to add links into the information box with her picture. Other than that, I really think this was a great article and you did a great job! And you also made me aware of how much work I need to add to my own.
Carrot47 (talk) 18:23, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Very strong article which covers what she did out of film and, without telling us directly, infers that both her screenwriting work and activism were inform by the same positions. I think my only comment is that you should format the filmography in the table in a way which is 'cleaner,' adding capitals at the start of works and perhaps adding the ability to "sort" the filmography by dates/role/etc. Its too bad there are a lot of dead links with the article (red links), I don't know if you could remedy this by adding external links. And one last thing, your citations are kinda clumped up at the end of paragraphs, I'd try to make it more precise and therefore, easy to track. Good job!
Ef674 (talk) 17:16, 26 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
