I'll take up this review as part of the chain of Paralympians submitted in past few days. I mainly focus on copy editing issues. Given the size of these articles the GAR itself should not take too long so I will leave down some initial comments on these articles within 48 hours. I'm sorry if I'm reviewing too many of your articles, Hawkeye! ☠Jaguar☠23:18, 13 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Just like the previous article, any possible expansion (either big or small) would be appreciated. If no such details can be found, don't worry - this does not affect the GA criteria.
There are two confusing sentences in this section: "He mentored and coached Michael Milton, Australia's first Winter Paralympics medallist" and then shortly after this "Graham also coached Jessica Gallagher, Australia's first Winter Paralympic medallist," - how can they both be Australia's first Winter Paralympic medalists?
"According to an interview published on the Australian Paralympic Committee site, his immediate priority is to prepare athletes for the 2014 Winter Paralympics," - the Winter Paralympics have finished, should this sentence need correcting?
I'll put this on hold for the standard seven days. The only problems with this article are a few copy editing issues I have mentioned above and a few confusing sentences that needs clarifying in the Coaching section. The Personal section would need expanding, but if it isn't possible then it should be no problem. Once those issues have been addressed this should have no problem passing the GAN. Thanks, ☠Jaguar☠20:40, 25 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I will interview him at some point. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:50, 26 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Y Jessica was the first female medallist. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:50, 26 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
