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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 04:18, 8 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
First and foremost, I didn't see a sandbox on your account, so I'll just type up my critique here for the time being instead.
- In Entymology, you're a little wordy when saying stuff like "one of the multiple possibilities is the option of." I'd get rid of the redundancy present there and potentially only mention the multiple possibilities part as of the second instance. - Citations are great and included in many areas where they were definitely needed. Good job on that and on revising the previous entries to match the cited works. - Although I appreciate the level of detail you put forth in regards to the animal species that live in the region, looking at existing mountain pages such as that of Mount Everest seem to focus more on the uncommon animals and animals that are unique/exotic to the location. I'd argue that unless you intend to list all of the species that exist in the area, the actual number is less important than the inclusion of behaviors and details that are related to those animals. Also, for the amount you have, I am uncertain two different subentries for that section of the article is necessary. Consider just breaking it into two paragraphs instead.
Falgaia (talk) 07:50, 23 October 2016 (UTC)[reply]
