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Oppose / Comments from KV5
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"Slovene football club from Maribor, Slovenia" - redundant. Remove "Slovene".
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Put abbreviations in parentheses instead of after dashes; example: "Football Association of Yugoslavia (FSJ)"
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"was a part of it" - was a member thereof would be more professional
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Un-link Slovenia at second link occurrence; it needs to be linked once only.
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"It details the club's achievements in senior league and cup competitions, and the top scorers for each season." - what details this? I think you meant to say "This list details..."
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"12 December, 1960" - dates are either December 12, 1960, or 12 December 1960, not a combination thereof
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"the third tier of the Republic League within the Yugoslav football system" - from my understanding, the Republic League is the third tier of the FSJ. So a better re-word would be the Republic League, the third tier of the Yugoslav football system
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"in the Yugoslav leagues" - comma after
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"independence of Slovenia in 1991" - comma after
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"five... 17... nine" - these are "comparable quantities" per MOS:NUM, change "five" and "nine" to 5 and 9, or "17" to seventeen (I prefer the latter but your choice)
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"at the end of 1980s" - end of the 1980s
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"and third division five times" - and the third division
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"in 1967–68 season" - inthe 1967–68 season
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"Since 1991 and the independence of Slovenia" - you do not need to reference the independence again, once was enough. Simply Since 1991 will suffice.
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"The first major success for the club was during their first season when they won the Slovenian Cup, a feat it has repeated six times to date" - your subject and verb aren't agreeing. Needs to be one of the following:
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The first major success for the club was during its first season when it won the Slovenian Cup, a feat it has repeated six times to date (preferred since you have previously referred to the club as "it", not they)
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The first major success for the club was during their first season when they won the Slovenian Cup, a feat they have repeated six times to date (in which case you need to change all references in the lead to "they")
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"In addition, the club became Slovenian league champions nine times in 20 seasons and is by far the most successful club in the country" - re-word as follows for neutrality, style, and fluff: The club won the league championship 9 times in 20 seasons and is the most successful club in the country
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"In 2009 the club also won the Slovenian Supercup" - to remove the bare year link and avoid confusion, re-word to The club also won the 2009 Slovenian Supercup
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"the only domestic trophy that was missing among club's honours" - the only domestic trophy
that was missing among the club's honours
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"Since their inception in 1960" - subject/verb agreement; see above. If using preferred solution, this should be Since its inception in 1960
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"25 times as part of the country's top division, 17 in second division and nine seasons in the third" - see below:
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25 seasons instead of "times"
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as a member of instead of "as part of"
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17 in the second division
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9
seasons in the third
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The tables definitely need to be reconstructed as sortable.
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Tables do not comply with WP:ACCESS requirements; see Wikipedia:Manual of Style (accessibility)/Data tables tutorial for details on how to fix this. The tables need captions, row-headers, etc.
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Bold text in the tables is a violation of MOS:BOLD; remove.
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Colors are used in the table without symbols to convey information to color-blind readers; all colors need to be accompanied by an appropriate symbol (see List of Philadelphia Phillies seasons as an example).
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Images need alternative text.
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At the very least, all of the seasons in the "Div" column should be linked; if the articles don't exist yet, a redlink is fine as long as it points to the right place.
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Table rows as a listed exception to WP:OVERLINK, so things like player names, trophy names, etc., should be linked at all appearances instead of first appearance.
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Blank table cells need em-dashes.
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In the "Footnotes", sentence fragments should not end with a period or full stop (example: "Player was top league goalscorer during the Slovenian PrvaLiga season" is a sentence fragment, not a complete sentence)
All in all a lot of work remaining to be done. — KV5 • Talk • 20:20, 2 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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Additional comments from KV5
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The symbols used are not ACCESS-compliant. Replace the dagger and double-dagger with the {{dagger}} and {{double-dagger}} templates (the symbols redirect there, so you can just put in the braces) and the corresponding alt text.
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The 1960 and 1991 table rows shouldn't be in the table because they are historical events, not seasons; it also botches the sorting. You have covered all of this information in the lead. If you want the Yugoslav and Slovenian sections to be split, you can either have two tables under subheaders with the same format or put a footnote on the 1991-92 season noting that it was the team's first in the Slovenian league.
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Table still needs a caption (don't forget a caption if you split into two tables).
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Images still need alt text, per NapHit above. — KV5 • Talk • 11:14, 22 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Hope these comments help. — KV5 • Talk • 11:10, 22 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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Comment: I have done everything you have asked for. Except this; Table still needs a caption, as I am not sure what exactly do you mean?Ratipok (talk) 18:26, 22 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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I've added the caption for you. NapHit (talk)
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