| Comments from Liam E. Bekker
In reference to the above comments, I don't see any issue with this being a stand-alone page and it is common for the top goalscorer of a national team to have a list for their record of goals. My recommendations follow:
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The key refers to the non-official goals scored against Luxembourg. In this regard, the article is a bit vague on when the record was officially recognized by a) Belgium and (b FIFA. The match against Japan in 2017 saw him break the national record but FIFA only recognized it later. It is sort-of mentioned in reference to the hat-tricks later but I think, for the benefit of readers, it is important to give more attention to the distinction.
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I don't think it is necessary to mention his act of sportsmanship (more suited for the mother article) or to make mention of his most recent goals and appearances. The context of his most recent goals is obviously important but I would rephrase it to say something along the lines of "On (date), Lukaku scored twice against Tunisia... which took his overall tally..."
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And maybe just start that same sentence as a new para for ease of reading.
That's about it from what I can pick up. Liam E. Bekker (talk) 09:04, 7 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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Liam E. Bekker Hi Liam, thanks for your comments, much appreciated. I've tried to add more detail and rejig what was there around the Luxembourg goals. Oddly I can't find anything which directly supports the fact that FIFA changed their mind on the hat-trick being unofficial other than, say, his 2018 World Cup profile which clearly includes the three goals in his post-WC record there... I'm getting a bit "can't see the wood for the trees" on moving stuff around, perhaps you'd be kind enough to take another look and see what you might suggest? The sportsmanship is fine in my opinion and I've clarified it to note that he basically denied himself a chance of a hat-trick in doing so. And the most recent goal (which has changed twice since you reviewed the list!) is also relevant in my mind, and is standard across most lists of this type. Cheers again. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:01, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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HiThe Rambling Man, my concern with the recent goals was from a maintenance point of view - namely that it would need to be regularly updated - but that's pretty much the norm on all football pages so it's no big issue. Regarding the changes made about the record, the only changes I can suggest are some small word tweaks as follows:
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...when Lukaku scored his 31st goal in a match against Japan in November 2017. FIFA, however, did not initially recognise the record... (I say initially not because they have since recognised it but because they have no choice but to recognise it now because he has gone past the record anyhow).
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(re hat-tricks and as the FIFA dispute with Luxembourg is already mentioned) ...Lukaku has scored two hat-tricks during his international career, including the treble against Luxembourg and another in a 9–0...
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These are both stylistic suggestions so you're welcome to chop and change as you see fit to try and get it to flow. I have no other concerns. Liam E. Bekker (talk) 10:36, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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Liam E. Bekker I've tried to work those suggestions in, so hopefully I'm done? If not, feel free to tweak further yourself, I'm not precious about it! Thanks again for your review comments. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:43, 12 September 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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