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5x expanded by Bloom6132 (talk). Self-nominated at 14:55, 2 August 2022 (UTC).
This is more of a comment than a review for now, but perhaps something more can be said about Moloney here? The hook is somewhat on the pedestrian side of things given that the connection between "social worker" and "founding a band" isn't clear here. Maybe either a hook about his father being an air traffic controller or the Green Fields being a band that plays Irish music could add interest? Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 01:42, 3 August 2022 (UTC)
Disagree. The hook should be focused the subject himself, not his family members/what they did. And adding more details to the hook will make it less interesting. I think Moloney bridging two distinct fields transcontinentally makes for a far more interesting hook than what could be said using the suggestions above. Full review needed. —Bloom6132 (talk) 15:15, 3 August 2022 (UTC)
The article meets requirements, the hook facts are cited inline and verified. A QPQ has been done. Earwigs detects significant overlap with this source, so that needs to be resolved before approval. I disagree with the above statement: as far as I can tell, the transcontinental thing is not obvious at first glance and unless additional details are added the reader won't get why him establishing the band is so important. That's not to say the hook fact itself is unsalvageable. It's more of the hook as currently written is rather pedestrian, but it can still be improved to become a decent hook. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 06:31, 4 August 2022 (UTC)
I am fine with ALT1. I am, however, not fine with you striking ALT0, as it satisfies WP:DYKHOOK (i.e. sourced, neutral, not unduly negative, etc.). Requesting a second look at both ALT0 and ALT1 from an uninvolved editor (who can also confirmed that any WP:CLOP has been removed). —Bloom6132 (talk) 07:36, 9 August 2022 (UTC) I frankly do not think that ALT0 meets the "interesting to a broad audience" criterion here. And "interesting to a broad audience" is also a part of WP:DYKHOOK. I have re-struck ALT0 as nominators generally don't unstrike an already struck hook without some discussion with the reviewer. As I mentioned earlier, I am not against ALT0's hook fact, merely its wording. I am still open to some variation of ALT0 (perhaps with additional context or different wording), just not ALT0 as currently written. If you are not willing to propose alternate versions of ALT0 then I suppose I'll be approving ALT1 instead as a compromise. Narutolovehinata5 (talk · contributions) 07:45, 9 August 2022 (UTC)
Well, I disagree with your subjective assessment (which is not the case with the other criteria in WP:DYKHOOK – they're pretty clear cut and objective). The last time you suggested an alternative hook for one of my noms claiming that it would make a better, more catchy DYK hook (Wayne Cooper (basketball), back in June this year), it drew in just 1,938 views. So there is good reason to (at the very least) question your take on what constitutes "interesting to a broad audience". That's why I've asked for an uninvolved editor to have a look at ALT0 and ALT1. For the new reviewer:
relying on Narutolovehinata5's original review, I'll give this a tick. theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (she/they) 17:21, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
