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1 Neil Young  





2 Winamp  





3 Gold  





4 Ol' Dirty Bastard  





5 Passenger car  





6 Fair Use  





7 Krag-Jørgensen  





8 Lesch-Nyhan syndrome  





9 Computer mouse  





10 Revolver (album)  





11 Auto Train  





12 Skateboarding trick  





13 Incest  





14 OK Soda  





15 Mariavite Church  





16 Visit of King George IV to Scotland  





17 Republic of China  





18 Anarchism in Spain  





19 Japan  





20 ß  



20.1  ß (Contested -- Jun 28)  





20.2  New discussion  







21 Lesch-Nyhan syndrome  





22 Falklands War  





23 Noel Gallagher  





24 Nuclear reactor  





25 Remembrance Day  





26 Cat  





27 David Irving  





28 Hydrogen  





29 Light  





30 High jump  





31 Creation accounts in Genesis  





32 Behavioral finance  





33 Kangaroo  





34 Dystopia  





35 InuYasha  





36 Formula One  





37 Treaty establishing a constitution for Europe  





38 Bicycle  





39 Sgt. Pepper's Lonely Hearts Club Band  





40 The Simpsons  





41 Gunpowder Plot  





42 Pascal's Wager  





43 B-29 Superfortress  





44 Optigan  





45 Jesus  














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No, he's not as important as Elvis or Dylan, but I think its a pretty comprehensive article. Self nomination -- I wrote nearly all of this, modulo some copy editing. --- GWO 16:18, 3 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Actually, SWA isn't just DCG (which is the old I-IV-V, which is every rock song ever), but a particular formation of the C and G that are the same as "Alabama" and "Ziggy Stardust" and a few others of that time but which are not used very commonly. Young liked that C formation (to tab it, it would be 3/5, 2/4, 0/3, 3/2, 3/1), and you almost never see it anywhere else in LS's stuff (although the Gsus is used plenty of places, part. in "Freebird"). Lyrically, they refer to "Southern Man," of course, but the title invokes "Alabama," which is a song that is even less deft in its criticism. I also think that "redneck" absolutely shouldn't be part of the reference. That's POV. The struggle over Civil Rights reflected in the song battle was the Dixiecrat stuff. Wallace and Maddux were ignoramuses, but it's irresponsible and inflammatory to refer to the entire southern Democratic party (which was anti-Civil Rights act) that way. We saw the fruits of that kind of name calling just recently. Geogre 17:26, 4 Nov 2004 (UTC)
Well, I can't speak for how common x32033 is LS's work but its ubiquitous in folk music, (Cos of the easy fingering to the full G). And anyway that's not what's tabbed here, [2] or how I was taught to play it. And I don't think its in Alabama either. Compromise : mention that it has relevance to multiple Young songs. -- GWO
Well I don't think any comparison with Dylan would be necessarily POV, consider the following quote from allmusic.com: Young's body of work ranks second only to Bob Dylan in terms of depth, and he was able to sustain his critical reputation, as well as record sales, for a longer period of time than Dylan … As to Shakespeare, I don't know about Cervantes, but I might expect a comparison with Christopher Marlowe. Paul August 14:45, Nov 10, 2004 (UTC)
I don't think the allmusic quote is NPOV or terribly accurate. "Second only to Dylan in terms of depth" according to whom? Fans of Bruce Springsteen, Lou Reed, Joni Mitchell, Laura Nyro, Tim Buckley, Nick Drake might kick up some disagreement there. A longer period of time??? Every Dylan album from 1963 to 1974 sold pretty well. Many since (Slow Train, Love & Theft) have done OK too. Young's peak lasted from Everybody Knows This Is Nowhere to ... Tonight's The Night, which is 5 years. He's had returns to occasional good sales (Unplugged, Freedom & Ragged Glory spring to mind) but I bet Trans sold fewer than Saved, and Everybody's Rocking did worse than Down In The Groove. -- GWO 15:10, 10 Nov 2004 (UTC)
I actually think that the allmusic.com quote reinforces my point by being so clearly POV in itself, as demonstrated by GWO. I'd add, which recent Young album gets near Love and Tefth in any department? Filiocht 15:26, Nov 10, 2004 (UTC)
I don't want to dispute the relative accuracy of the allmusic.com quote, but I do dipute that "any comparison with Dylan will be POV, by definition". Paul August 16:54, Nov 10, 2004 (UTC)
I'm interested to see how, apart form sales figures, they could be compared objectively. Filiocht 15:32, Nov 11, 2004 (UTC)
My thoughts on how to link them : (i) Neil was, for a while, the rock press's favourite "New Dylan". Springsteen had overtaken him by 76 though. (ii) Dylan admits to listening to Neil on "Highlands". Not liking, necessarily. (iii) Neil played at Dylan's Tribute Concert, and dubbed it Bobfest. (iv) They both play harmonica badly, and have whiny voices. Any more for any more. (v) They're not dead yet. -- GWO
Well potentially applicable concepts like "depth", "range of genre and style", "longevity", "influence" along with many others are all objectifiable (although perhaps difficult to measure). Interpreted broadly enough every statement is POV. Paul August 16:55, Nov 11, 2004 (UTC)
But why compare Young to Dylan? Why not compare him to Joni Mitchell. There are just as many interesting parallels in those two careers, including the wide variety of styles. (Few Dylan albums couldn't be classified as folk, blues or rock). Sales volumes are probably closer too. Why not compare Young to David Crosby or Steve Stills, instead? -- GWO
Well probably for the same reason that "the rock press" called him the "New Dylan" and not the "New Mitchell". Dylan is a kind of "gold standard" and a comparison to him might, IMHO, help establish the relative importance of Young. However Comparing him to Dylan, doesn't preclude comparing him to others. By all means do compare him to Mitchell, they do have "interesting parallels, and this would also "help establish relative importance". At any rate it's just my opinion ;-) Paul August 17:37, Nov 11, 2004 (UTC)
I've got nothing Neutral to say, wrt to comparing Young and Dylan. If you want to right something, I recommend you add it.
the same reason that "the rock press" called him the "New Dylan".
That reason is "laziness", and an insatiable desire to pigeonhole people and promote the Next Big Thing. Let's not do that. GWO
For what it's worth ;-), Thrasherswheat.org [3], a repository of Neil Young information available on the internet, has a page [4] which chronicles some of the comparisons which have been made of Young and Dylan. Here are some of the quotes they cite:
  • Young is still about as individual, talented and touching a musical poet as American popular music has produced, worthy of comparison with Bob Dylan. John Rockwell, New York Times
  • Young is comparable only to Bob Dylan in terms of his contributions to songwriting and rock n' roll. David Rosen, Ink Blot Magazine
  • Though Neil Young will never have the iconic clout of Bob Dylan, there are citizens who'll tell you he's made better music … Robert Christgau, Playboy
  • Whereas Bob Dylan's music formed the aesthetic spear-head of generational rage and moral fervor in the mid-Sixties, Young's subsequently expressed, with equal credibility, the accompanying guilt, self-doubt and paranoia, especially in its obsession with time and age. Stephen Holden, Rolling Stone.
Perhaps the above comparisons are all hopelessly POV, but it must mean something that these (and many other) writers have thought it important to make such comparisons. It seems to me that something of what is being said above could be useful and relevant to our article. Anyway, since I'm not objecting to the article, perhaps all this discussion should just go to the talk page? As I said above I think this is an excellent article on an important subject. I'm just trying, perhaps incompetently, to make it even better ;-) Paul August 16:36, Nov 12, 2004 (UTC)
A selection of music critics really like Neil Young, and think he's (nearly) as good as Neil Young. Fair enough. Sadly, thats a self selected bunch (Dave Marsh, for example, has also compared the two, noting
"Instead of a unified body of work, Neil Young has forged only a series of fragments, some relatively inspired, some absolutely awful.[5]"
Do we include both of these analyses, one or neither?
Other than the fact that 70s rock critics are capable of banging on about Dylan at terrifying length, do these comparisons tell us anything (a) interesting or (b) insightful? Secondly, is there a critical consensus which we could reasonably summarise, thereby maintaining our NPOV? IMHO, the answer to both those questions is no. Which is why I am not going to write anything in the article, on that issue. If you want to try synthesise something coherent from these critics' squawkings, I wish you luck, and if you succeed you're a better man than I. -- GWO
NPOV is NOT about only summarizing critical consensus. The idea behind NPOV is to include different opinions, including less widely held ones, but attribute all opinions to their supporters. Fredrik | talk 18:27, 12 Nov 2004 (UTC)
But we can't report everyone's opinion, and in the lack of anything like a consensus, who's opinions do we select? -- GWO
In general, we should present opinions with prominent supporters or opinions which can be demonstrated to be popular (if not in majority). Being able to quote four different critics is certainly good enough. Fredrik | talk 19:28, 12 Nov 2004 (UTC)
Five, if you count the AllMusic guy, but whose counting ;-) Even a comment like "Neil was, for a while, the rock press's favourite "New Dylan" " might be helpful ;-) Paul August 18:55, Nov 16, 2004 (UTC)
Also I agree with Geogre's suggestion of adding something like "Neil Young is a rock and folk musician regarded as one of the most important figures of the 1960's through 1990's" to the lead, would also help address my concern. Paul August 19:10, Nov 16, 2004 (UTC)
I've got no problem with that, and will act upon it. I have been thinking about the Dylan/Young issue, and I really can't think of anything accurate and non-superficial to say about them, specifically --- GWO
Oh, and by the way I would like to make it clear that I don't think the "Dylan" issue above should keep this article from being a FA. Paul August 03:18, Nov 19, 2004 (UTC)


Winamp[edit]

I like winamp. 5.06 came out recently, and it's made the news as Nullsoft's plug has been officially pulled by AOL recently (google news), and people are sad to see it go. Covers the history well, although not in detail (this would probably change after it was featured, I guess). And yes, it's really a self-nom because NSV isn't quite big enough yet and that's one of the features of the newer winamp that I like. --TIB (talk) 00:18, Nov 21, 2004 (UTC)


Gold[edit]

A lovely, clear example of the element template. A good brief coverage of its properties, history, and various forms (through pictures). +sj+ 05:41, 21 Nov 2004 (UTC)

(talk) 23:58, Nov 21, 2004 (UTC)


Ol' Dirty Bastard[edit]

Self-nom. I mostly rewrote this, from its original text but did not begin it. Content is concise, although could probably stand to have more on his musical career. As it stands now musical career and legal troubles are about the same length. Since he has recently passed on I figure this would be a good time. Alkivar 15:35, 20 Nov 2004 (UTC)

1) see above, I have corrected this.
2) I think "Ol' Dirty Bastard" should come first as its what he is best known as. His real name is still within the first sentance.
3) It has more detail than the VH1 and MTV biography pages on the man. I think that its got enough content to warrant FAC. ANY article can always use more content, and I am sure this one will grow with time. I'm sure shorter articles have been considered and approved as well. Length is not a necessary consideration according to What is a featured article, however this article is comprehensive and "does not omit any major facts or details".
4) see my comment #3. unless you have a specific objection to the timeline formatting I consider this a non-issue.
5) his career is "glossed over" ??? We mention specifically all of his offenses, we link to their definitions, anything more than that would be POV.
Alkivar 21:10, 20 Nov 2004 (UTC)


Passenger car[edit]

Here's one that I've been working on for about a month now. I've included a brief history of the passenger car along with information on major types of passenger cars and a few photos that I've taken at railroad museums in my area to illustrate a few of the car types. I've also included a bit on the differences between heavyweight and lightweight cars, which I have yet to see discussed anywhere else on the site. slambo 17:53, Nov 21, 2004 (UTC)

Neutral. It's a very nice article, but it's exclusively about North American practice. It needs considerable expansion to cover practice in the rest of the world. -- Arwel 22:22, 21 Nov 2004 (UTC)
I've expanded the History section a bit based on a refence that I had. There's a bit more on European developments now. I'm still digesting this information, but at least there's a start to including it in the article. The car types list really doesn't change all that much with this new reference, just the different dates of introduction. slambo 02:01, Nov 22, 2004 (UTC)
Abstain, a bit low on wikification. Happy to change vote when it's fixed :-) [[User:MacGyverMagic|Mgm|(talk)]] 10:32, Nov 22, 2004 (UTC)
Is it more linked phrases or more section headings or what? I'm not entirely sure what needs to be done based on your comment. The only part that I haven't already listed on the Talk page is that I'd like to expand the intro paragraph, but I haven't been able to come up with sufficient prose to do that. slambo 11:52, Nov 22, 2004 (UTC)
There's a little bit more to the intro paragraph and a couple more links. What else do you suggest? slambo 18:09, Nov 22, 2004 (UTC)
Positive, well-written on a good broad topic, could use more photos, detail, and references. Vaoverland 12:54, 22 Nov 2004 (UTC)
Thanks :) I'd really like to get some more exterior photos, especially of these car types from European or Asian railroad use (anyone out there who can help with this?), or some from the early days of railroad construction. I've taken a quick look through the Library of Congress website, but didn't quite find what I was looking for. I'm also looking through my own library of railroad resources for more information and details. slambo 14:52, Nov 22, 2004 (UTC)
Thanks for the suggestions. I'll get on them right away... slambo 22:05, Nov 22, 2004 (UTC)
Adding metric unit conversions is done (at least I don't see any that I missed). I've found a couple other references in my own library that basically support what was already written, and the new information in them is slowly being added as I go through it all. I hadn't thought of putting a manufacturers section in, but it can easily be added (I can think of a few off the top of my head that could easily be expanded into articles of their own like American Car and Foundry and Budd Company, and Pullman Company already is an article but needs to be brought up to date to include the company's products as Pullman-Standard). slambo 11:38, Nov 23, 2004 (UTC)
You're right, I'm still working on it, and I do intend to add a section on military uses and specialized passenger cars for military use. slambo 18:50, Nov 27, 2004 (UTC)




Fair Use[edit]

I actually find this article to be really informative and worth reading just for fun; not just for rules on posting. It's also complete and only lacks a photo (kind of hard to add though - maybe an example?). Nrbelex 06:33, 22 Nov 2004 (UTC)



Krag-Jørgensen[edit]

Self-nom, in as much as me providing most/all of the infomation in the norwegian section. As far as I can see, the pictures just added makes it comply with all the FAC guidelines.

Whoops, forgot to sign my nomination... me bad WegianWarrior 05:55, 23 Nov 2004 (UTC)
Added the ones I've used - can't speak for the others who have edited. Also, didn't add sources others can't access, such as me bugging people I know who owns a Krag ;) WegianWarrior 06:48, 23 Nov 2004 (UTC)
My estimate is that the references cited supports between 80% and 90% of the article as it stands... of course, if it is needed to come up to the standard needed, I could "sprinkle pagenumbers" thruout the text. However, if your objection is based on the fact that the main source cited isn't in English, then I fear that no article on more obscure subjects can ever reach Featured status, as there simply is not any printed material avilable in English... WegianWarrior 09:12, 23 Nov 2004 (UTC)
Please do not sprinkle page numbers (see my comment at "Alchemy" below"), Wikipedia is not a learned journal.--[[User:Bishonen|Bishonen (talk)]] 18:55, 23 Nov 2004 (UTC)
if your objection is based on the fact that the main source cited isn't in English No, it isn't. Mark1 00:40, 24 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Lesch-Nyhan syndrome[edit]

support (self nomination) i think this article would be a great candidate seeing as it has been substantially re-worked. i think its ready for featured status. --Larsie 16:52, 19 Nov 2004 (UTC)

  • I am somewhat curious as to why it was removed as all objections were addressed and fixed. the jargon has been formatted to be understandable if you read carefully (which is how you should read an article anyway). also there were more supports than there were objections. --Larsie 17:03, 22 Nov 2004 (UTC)
  • There were objections listed, specifically a number of people still felt there was too much jargon. That is presumably why it was not promoted. When not promoted after about two weeks articles are removed from here. The convention is that a few weeks pass and perhaps another round of peer review before relisting here. Thats just for politeness and respect for other editors time. Another person just noted on the peer review listing they still feel it has too much jargon. - Taxman 16:46, Nov 23, 2004 (UTC)
You are of course entitled to your vote, but repeating parts of the introduction is not that bad, because the lead section is supposed to be a summary of the rest of the article. That requires being somewhat repetitive in ideas if not literal quotes. Repetiveness within a section is not good of course. - Taxman 16:46, Nov 23, 2004 (UTC)
the introduction is meant to introduce the article and the following paragraphs within the article are supposed to elaborate on key points within the introduction. unacceptable? have you ever written an essay in school? come on now. --Larsie 18:30, 23 Nov 2004 (UTC)

oh and if those who can't understand the jargon in the article please point out where, so that it can be fixed, or even make some changes of your own. for those who can't understand it would be difficult for yourself to write an article like that and it goes both ways, so for people who are able to understand the jargon it would be difficult to change it to something else as it already makes sense the way it is. --Larsie 18:34, 23 Nov 2004 (UTC)


Computer mouse[edit]

Seems to be a nice complete account--Enceladus 02:37, Nov 17, 2004 (UTC)


Revolver (album)[edit]

Part of Featured Albums Project, and not a self-nom, though I've made a few edits. Tuf-Kat 18:08, Nov 19, 2004 (UTC)



Auto Train[edit]

This is a self-nomination. This article is a collaborative effort of Vaoverland and Slambo. Each of us has been working daily and/or nightly on railroad-related articles. This one should have a broad appeal to include families and younger Wikipedia readers and presents an interesting opportunity to learn more about trains, including several types of locomotives, passenger cars, auto carrier freight cars (called autoracks in trade terminology) and even the old favorite, the caboose. It is also about a new innovative business idea, making profits, growing too much, having bad luck, and bankruptcy and failure. Resurrection of failed private railroad passenger service is what Amtrak is all about, and this is an example. There is also a mention of the debate underway about privatization of such services. All photos are credited and used with permission, and we have enhanced some of the articles with internal link, such as autorack, and are working on the few which still lack an article. Suggestions for improvement are welcome. All aboard? Vaoverland 10:06, 17 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Skateboarding trick[edit]

Seems pretty good, interesting! - Ta bu shi da yu 06:42, 17 Nov 2004 (UTC)




Incest[edit]

Well written, interesting, covers all ascpects (social, religious, legal, biological) of the topic. -- Kpalion 18:39, 16 Nov 2004 (UTC)



OK Soda[edit]

Self-nom. I finally got around to addressing the last of the issues brought up in the last nomination here. --DropDeadGorgias (talk) 19:32, Nov 15, 2004 (UTC)

Mariavite Church[edit]

Good article about very interesting religious movement that was established in Poland, but it is almost unknown there. I've started this article, but since that time many other Wikipedians have added lots of new information. Slawojarek 18:03, 13 Nov 2004 (UTC)


Visit of King George IV to Scotland[edit]

Very well written and a fascinating subject. Kosebamse 23:16, 9 Nov 2004 (UTC)


Republic of China[edit]

I have had nothing to do with this article, other than reading it after looking (and tweaking) Flag of the Republic of China. It seems pretty good to me -- ALoan (Talk) 15:27, 12 Nov 2004 (UTC)



Anarchism in Spain[edit]

Looks like feature article material to me. Loads of information and some nice pictures. Plus the subject itself is pretty interesting. Wareware 05:09, 13 Nov 2004 (UTC)

  1. Lead section is too long - there's normally no need to have greater than 3 paragraphs; 6 is definitely too many!
  2. At 44kb the article is too long - some of the sections could very easily be shortened here and spun off into other articles, if necessary.
  3. Shouldn't use the word 'libertarian' in first sentence. It has different meanings in the US than elsewhere plus it isn't commonly used outside the US.
  4. I get the feeling that the article isn't aimed at the layman: someone who knows nothing about anarchism or Spain. This would require a change in approach to think of the reader, explaining all terms clearly (eg no layman will be familiar with the term 'anarcho-syndicalism', and or even 'feminism' i the sense intended in the article).
  5. In need of a copy edit - some long sentences could be broken up, one and two sentence paragraphs could be merged into longer paragraphs, and there's the occasional grammatical error.jguk 06:14, 13 Nov 2004 (UTC)


Japan[edit]

A great example of the country template. +sj+ 06:38, 10 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Removed second link to Wikitravel. Fg2 11:15, Nov 10, 2004 (UTC)




ß[edit]

The entire section discussing the article in question was deleted, surely accidentally, in a process documented at Talk:ß. Should the previous participants be notified that it has been resurrected? --Jerzy(t) 19:33, 2004 Nov 9 (UTC) [sig belated by several minutes]

ß (Contested -- Jun 28)[edit]

This is another very interesting and informative one. User:Cow 01:39, 28 Jun 2004 (UTC)

New discussion[edit]



Lesch-Nyhan syndrome[edit]

self nomination i've been writing this article for a few days now and hope its up to par, so tell me what you guys think. ya i know but those are the best images i could find in wikipedia. --Larsie 23:54, 9 Nov 2004 (UTC)

I see now that I missed the ratio because it mixed "one" with "380,000." I made that "1:380,000" to prevent anyone else missing it with eyes as tired as mine were. Geogre 15:26, 10 Nov 2004 (UTC)
Support if a lay lead is introduced at the head to set forth the disease in plain language before the launch into the scientific description. I have no objections to the way the article is written in its body, but I do think we owe readers a courtesy of common language first, especially in the lead. Geogre 15:26, 10 Nov 2004 (UTC)
Also, I feel that the lead is now sufficiently user-friendly. After a lead that gives an overview of the subject, I personally think that precision and technical terminology are acceptable, so I don't agree with trying to explain every specialist term in the article per se. Summary sentences in "plain English" at the heads of each technical section could benefit, but I do not feel that we would be demanding that a high math article or computer science article explain each term before use, so neither should we here. Geogre 00:52, 11 Nov 2004 (UTC)
Fragile X 0.5
Duchenne muscular dystrophy 0.3
X-linked ichthyosis 0.2
Haemophilia A 0.1
Becker muscular dystrophy 0.05
Haemophilia B 0.03

Larsie's estimate is far below this, at only 0.0026. Is there a precedent for such rare diseases to be accepted as featured articles in Wikipedia? Axl 13:45, 10 Nov 2004 (UTC)

I've replaced "hypotonia" with "abnormally decreased muscle tone (hypotonia)". Other examples of terms needing explanation are: "extrapyramidal", "pyramidal", "dystonia", "choreoathetosis", "opisthotonus", "hyperreflexia" "extensor plantar", "hyperuricemia", "nephrolithiasis", "hematuria" to name a few. Paul August 17:25, Nov 10, 2004 (UTC)
all these terms are explained in the articles that they link to to exdplain them all would expand the aricle to the point in which it would be to exhaustive to read. --Larsie 17:28, 10 Nov 2004 (UTC)
Well "pyramidal" and "extensor plantar" aren't linked ["plantar reflexes" is now linked Paul August 03:07, Nov 11, 2004 (UTC)], and the first use of "extrapyramidal" wasn't linked (I've linked it now). Also, consider that articles should stand alone without links so, for example, printed versions make sense. It is better, where possible to add short definitions, similar to my edit above, or your "uric acid crystals or calculi". Other examples: "hyperreflexia" could be replaced by "overactive reflexes (hyperreflexia)" and "hematuria" with "blood in the urine (hematuria)", to name just two. [These two have now been addressed. Paul August 19:24, Nov 10, 2004 (UTC)] Paul August 18:28, Nov 10, 2004 (UTC)
Well a good lead section (please read) needs to be accessible to those that have not read every one of those articles. Yes, it is difficult for some subjects, but it can be done. It may involve carefully considering what information is truly important enough for inclusion in the intro. But yes, all of those terms either need to be explained in the intro where they are used or not be used in the intro. See black hole for an example of a good intro on a potentially difficult subject. Only the important topics are covered, and it is accessible to most people. I think you may just be trying to tell too much about the subject in the intro, that instead should be included in the detailed subsetions. - Taxman 18:08, Nov 10, 2004 (UTC)
  • Well i think i'm done i re-worked what was requested and added a bunch of applicable images i hope you'll be pleased have a look. Lesch-Nyhan syndrome --Larsie 20:11, 10 Nov 2004 (UTC)
  • Intro is much better but I worked on it a small bit, so caveat emptor. The rest of the article still could use some explaining of the various medical terms inline as explained in other comments above. Finally the last sentence in the inheritance section refers to less severe versions of the mutation, but I couldn't see anywhere else in the article this was covered. How much does it vary? That sentence needs to be expanded where it is and that idea should be covered wherever in the article is appropriate. Taxman
[I took the liberty of signing the above for Taxman ;-) Paul August 02:22, Nov 11, 2004 (UTC)]
I think this version of the intro, written by user:Jfdwolff but reverted by user:Larsie is better:
Lesch-Nyhan syndromeorLNS is a severe medical condition caused by a genetic defect that affects mainly males. Patients have severe mental and physical symptoms throughout life, experiencing severe arthritis, gout, self-mutilation, as well as difficulty in achieving normal function. LNS was first described in 1964 by Dr. Michael Lesch and Dr. William Nyhan. The disease is due to a mutation located on the X chromosome. It is a rare disease, affecting 1:380,000 live births. No cure is available, and continuous follow-up and symptom control is required.
Paul August 02:11, Nov 11, 2004 (UTC)
Ok, with Larsie's agreement (I think) I've changed the intro back to Jfdwolff's version above - plus I've reincorporated some of Neutrality's edits and added a tweak of my own. Paul August 04:18, Nov 11, 2004 (UTC)
The image has now been removed. Paul August 15:36, Nov 11, 2004 (UTC)
I think the jargon level is much better now than it was, and I think it is now probably at an acceptably low level for a FA. Paul August 17:55, Nov 17, 2004 (UTC)
I've just reread the second paragraph of the lead section. It's still too confusing. I disagree. You still need a reasonable level of medical knowledge (which I do not have) to be able to understand this article.jguk 22:11, 17 Nov 2004 (UTC)
Ok i'm a little confused as to where we are in this thing, is it done if not what exactly do we still need to work on, fix, edit, delete, add, or de-jargon? --Larsie 20:03, 14 Nov 2004 (UTC)
Well one small thing, could you respond to my last comment above about "definive"? Thanks. Paul August 14:52, Nov 16, 2004 (UTC) now fixed Paul August 21:22, Nov 18, 2004 (UTC)

Suggestions: Contextualize the extrapyramidal system for the reader since it is so pertinent to the pathology. Link macrocytic (anemia). Rather than a mini treatise on genetics (pictures in section 2.1) you should refer the reader to a link. Use of a genetic tree diagram would help to illustrate inheritance patterns. Illustration of organic chemistry reaction. Illustration of 3d structure of molecule. Define "sibs" for the layman before using the abbreviation. Define or hyperlink PCR and RT-PCR. Some additional material on SNP typing for identifying HPRT1 gene would keep the article current. prometheus1


Falklands War[edit]

Article has improved much since its last nomination in September. Well written. =) --Andylkl 08:26, 9 Nov 2004 (UTC)


Noel Gallagher[edit]

Sorry to stick this up again but I've made extensive changes and additions, and am very proud it. I cannot see how to improve it further and would really appreciate hints. User:Vague Rant did a lot of helpful work on it too.--Crestville 00:50, 10 Nov 2004 (UTC)

It's sorted--Crestville 15:55, 12 Nov 2004 (UTC)
'Oasis went on to become one of the most popular and successful British acts ever' - not really, there have been many British acts who've sold more records than them.
'made him a rich and respected man' - weasel words
'Oasis are considered by many to be the best British band since the Beatles' - weasel words
Songwriting section is overflowing with excessive praise, not very neutral especially considering his habit of blatantly ripping off other peoples' work is well known and even commented on in this article
'Amongst this albums 10 unforgettable tracks' and other examples - I've forgotten them all, I thought they were rubbish. The article suffers from this sort of subjective writing.
Transcripts of arguments seem to me to add nothing to the article.
In summary, the article is a considerable way from being neutral. These are only a few representative examples
'Oasis went on to become one of the most popular and successful British acts ever' - This is true, they are not the most popular and successful british act ever, but they're up there, as can be seen from there high positioning in those "100 greatest" shows they always have on VH1, and the act that every one of their albums has gone straight in at number 1 in the British charts.
They are nothing like one of the most popular and successful British acts ever. Queen, Led Zep, Rolling Stones, Dire Straits, etc etc have sold many many times as many records. Even Status Quo have sold over 100m records. I wouldn't be too surprised if Take That sold more records than them. Replace 'ever' with 'of the 1990s' and it might be an accurate statement.
'made him a rich and respected man' - He bloody is.
Rich=fact, respected=your opinion. Encyclopaedias shouldn't be opinionated.
'Oasis are considered by many to be the best British band since the Beatles' - weasel words - this is a widely held and well recognised comparison
Nonsense, I'm afraid, that is not a widely held opinion at all, and this kind of sentence is exactly what the weasel words article suggests should be avoided.
'Amongst this albums 10 unforgettable tracks' and other examples - Yeah, ok that's fair enough, didn't consider the possability of a Phil Collins fan taking an interest in the artical. Though on the basis of them being "rubbish" - continued sales of the album alone seems to prove general opinion is not in your favour.
Bad records often sell millions, but that's beside the point. The point is that the article is not written from a neutral point of view, it's written from a fan's point of view. Descriptions like 'unforgettable' have no place in an encyclopaedia article.
Songwriting section is overflowing with excessive praise, not very neutral especially considering his habit of blatantly ripping off other peoples' work is well known and even commented on in this article - This critisism seems redundent. How can I have glossed over his copying whilst at the same time commenting on it? In fact, a large section of the Songwriting bit is dedicated to this exact area! For what it's worth, I've tried to tone the rest of it down
It seems very strange to describe someone as a uniquely talented songwriter in one paragraph and then note their habit of plagiarising in the next. Again, the excessive praise is indicative of a non-NPOV article.
Transcripts of arguments seem to me to add nothing to the article - other that evidence of the nature of his relationship with his brother, which some people actually asked me to put in.
Just makes the article end oddly, and the quotes may look better in the body text instead of standing out in their own coloured boxes.

It would appear you are working more out of a dislike of the man than an actual attempt to help the page.--Crestville 18:33, 13 Nov 2004 (UTC)

No. I'm pointing out that the article contains a lot that is not factual, balanced or objective. I am pointing this out because I think the article will be a lot better with more facts and balance, less purple prose and weasel words. Worldtraveller 23:56, 14 Nov 2004 (UTC)
I'm not sure what you are suggeting about the coloured boxes, maybe you could do that if you wouldn't mind. As for an odd way to end the article, perhaps you could suggest a way to move about the sections so it ends on a more appropriate note. The Morning Glory page has links to some very good reviews. I'm adament it isn't rubbish, but, as you say, that's besides the point. However, I have gotten rid of the "unforgettable", which I hadn't noticed. Sorry to bore you when you clearly don't like the band but Oasis are one of the most popular and successful British acts ever, keep in mind, The Stones, Queen etc. have been selling consistantly for many decades now, so of course they've sold more, keep it in context. I assure you, Oasis - like it or not - are up there. I see no problem with leaving that, but I will incorperatre your suggestion as well. As for your Take That comments - a daggar to my heart (more than anything else, I doubt it's accurate). Noel's respect amongst other musicians can be seen from endevours like his work with McCartney and Weller, and the hand he has played in helping launch the careers of bands like Coldplay, Travis and the Zootons, I don't feel comfortable changing that (and another user actually asked me to add something to that effect). Noel's songwriting deserves both praise and critsim - which I feel is equally distributed. What would be unfair would be to either omitt his "plagirism" or his success and acclaim. We may have to agree to disagree. Also I can't find anything that describes him as a "Uniquley talented" songwriter. I appreciate your critisims, but we are totally working at cross purposes. Perhaps you could have a go at toning down the praise in the article, I know an objective eye is needed. I never expected this to become a featured article this time round, but I always end up improving it on the advice of others.--Crestville 17:50, 15 Nov 2004 (UTC)
I had a go at toning it down, but actually, I don't think it was that bad! I even found a bit about Be Here Now saying how much he dislikes the album. I'd totally fogotten I even wrote that. Perspective, you see. Perspective. Nice.--Crestville 18:31, 15 Nov 2004 (UTC)
1. Unfortunately, it comes off that way in the writing - can you try to make it more NPOV? (read the previous comments about Weasel words).
2. I like the Public Persona section - just needs expansion.
3. Brotherly love still needs to be expanded, you're not going into enough detail. Please trim the quotes down a little, those ugly grey boxes look messy.
4. Copyedit! Find a good book on Grammar (or read one of the many Wikipedia articles) ("Eats, Shoots and Leaves" is a great way to learn grammar) and apply your new found knowledge.
5. Keep it up, this has the potential to become a great article. Zerbey 18:17, 14 Nov 2004 (UTC)
  • Cheers, I know it's not up to scratch, but I can't put me finger on why, thats why I stuck it up here again. Grammar is far from me strong point, I've resolved to give up trying, let someone else take care of that. I know that the Gallaghers are really well known for arguing, put the problem is, most of it is myth. It's hard to build that up. I'll take a look at the public persona bit. I don't know what I could do about it. As for making it less POV, that may need an objective eye. --Crestville 19:01, 14 Nov 2004 (UTC)


Nuclear reactor[edit]

Oh, why not? I've looked this over, and it seems to be both complete and NPOV. -Litefantastic 15:51, 10 Nov 2004 (UTC)


Remembrance Day[edit]

Cat[edit]

To my ignorant eyes, this looks like an excellent, thorough article. —No-One Jones (m) 00:20, 8 Nov 2004 (UTC)

David Irving[edit]

For the most part a self-nomination, the article has been significantly re-worked and expanded since the last time it was nominated. Besides being a biography, it also dissects the rise of Holocaust revisionism. GeneralPatton 18:21, 6 Nov 2004 (UTC)

"enabling Irving to claim he was a serious historian, publishing original material"
"Though Irving's works were generally ignored by academics, and often criticized as inaccurate when reviewed by specialists" - contradicted by quotes from said academics and specialists
"Most serious historians picked the book apart, noting its numerous inaccuracies and misrepresentations" - who?
"Historians viewed the book as revisionist nonsense" - who?
"but they did help enforce the public impression that Irving was not just a historian of Fascism, but a Fascist historian"
The main authors of the article openly admit using the ADL as a reference!
-Xed 20:17, 6 Nov 2004 (UTC)
The same logic would mean referring to Mandela as a terrorist with every mention of him. - Xed 20:40, 6 Nov 2004 (UTC)
If the account were written before the end of apartheid, he would have been "a convicted terrorist regarded by the rest of the world as a freedom fighter." Thing is, I can't find any "rest of the world" that regards Irving as a freedom fighter. All I see is country after country denying him entry and calling him a holocaust denier. Geogre 04:26, 7 Nov 2004 (UTC)
No, both the US and Thatcher thought of Mandela as a terrorist. - Xed 18:12, 7 Nov 2004 (UTC)


Hydrogen[edit]

Thorough coverage of the subject; perhaps the best of the element articles. +sj+ 10:48, 3 Nov 2004 (UTC)


Light[edit]

No particular reason for nominating this. I just randomly came to the page and thought, "Why not?". (Note - this was nominated by an anon →Raul654 19:34, Nov 4, 2004 (UTC))

  • Categorising the sources of light into groups based on the chemical/physical process underlying them, or man-made vs natural.
  • Providing brief explanations of each of the above, also of the items in the measurements
  • giving the whole article a natural "flow" somehow. It currently flutters from topic to topic like a butterfly, but lacks any cohesive direction overall. --mike40033 06:42, 10 Nov 2004 (UTC)


High jump[edit]

"partial self-nom". i added to history, others helped with pictures and captioning, while others copy-edited, right down to the last umlauts. 128.8.222.44 22:36, 3 Nov 2004 (UTC)(srf)



Creation accounts in Genesis[edit]

This article was put together collaboratively by people with opposing POV. It reads excellently, and appears to completely surround the subject. CheeseDreams 20:37, 6 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Urm, doesnt NPOV mean that you don't take sides and resolve the arguments?
Further, angels-on-pinheads is actually a very important philosophical question about the nature of infinity and was first posed by Augustine of Hippo. CheeseDreams 00:01, 9 Nov 2004 (UTC)
No, it's not. And no it wasn't. It's a theological question, unrelated to infinity but related (surprise!) to the nature of Angels. And it's usually attributed to Thomas Aquinas. -- GWO 15:49, 9 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Behavioral finance[edit]

recreated from Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Archived nominations/November 2004

Partial self-nom - I added to pgreenfinch's original behavioural finance page. I think it's a good and well referenced article on a fairly interesting subset of finance/economics. But I might be biased :) Psychobabble

The outline of the article is split between behavioral finance and behavioral economics, the two criticism sections are specific to each of those sub-sections. I realise more needs to be done in the sub-topics, I wasn't sure if that was a criterion for having the main page (which is a broad outline of the field) featured. A lot of that stuff I'll fill in when I finish exams. Psychobabble
I don't know much about this sort of stuff. I assumed if it was OK for the Kahnenman wikipedia articke, it was OK for this one.Psychobabble

Kangaroo[edit]

I think its rather good. ZayZayEM 01:27, 31 Oct 2004 (UTC)

There is more information about each species in seperate articles. Though, mention of the numerous car accidents they cause would be good. Martyman 02:17, 31 Oct 2004 (UTC)

Dystopia[edit]

Clear, to the point, and I like it. Ivan 03:41, 1 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Object. Most of the article is a bullet-point list. Turn into prose, please.--Eloquence*


InuYasha[edit]

Not really a self-nom even though I have contributed to this page. The end result of many, many hours of tireless work by people with nothing better to do. If successful, this may be the first anime FA (although I can't swear to to that). -Litefantastic 21:29, 2 Nov 2004 (UTC)

  1. I agree that it would be good for the article to explain why InuYasha is interesting, but I think there is an important reason why it does not—most likely, such a section would be quite subjective. One of my favorite things about the series is that its characters are very sympathetic and varied. However, other people may have different preferences.
  2. Probably the reason the article does not discuss artistic style is either because it's difficult to describe or because it is not notable.
  3. I agree on this, and plan to move that section.
  4. Good idea, I will see what I can do in Photoshop.
  5. The "Overview" section covers some of this, but I think you are right that it could use some more information on the topics you suggested. (Although many of them, such as "the secret of its popularity" would also have to be rather subjective, though it is probably possible to make some general statements.)
[[User:JoshG|Josh | Talk]] 02:16, Nov 3, 2004 (UTC)
Okay. I tried to fix some of the problems that you mentioned. If anyone has any other improvements, though, feel free to make them. [[User:JoshG|Josh | Talk]] 05:14, Nov 3, 2004 (UTC)
You can explain why it is notable/interesting/popular while remaining objective by attributing opinions to notable reviewers, critics and enthusiasts, preferably by quoting them. The same goes for artistic style. Gdr 10:36, 2004 Nov 3 (UTC)
Further objections. (6) The ASCII art diagram is horrible; please make a proper diagram. (7) The U.S. and Japanese logos should be adjacent for comparison. (8) The picture of a purple circle contributes nothing. Is it even from the anime? Gdr 11:14, 2004 Nov 4 (UTC)
(6.) You may be right that an image diagram would be better, and I think that one should be made, but remember that someone made the ASCII diagram that is there now. I did not make it, but please don't call anyone's work 'horrible'. (7.) You're probably right, and in fact, I uploaded such an image a while ago. Right now, though it's only used in the character navigation template. I was going to replace the one that is there now with that, but I had kind of forgotten about it. I'll do that now. [[User:JoshG|Josh | Talk]] 23:23, Nov 4, 2004 (UTC)
OK. I made a little graphical timeline. Comments? [[User:JoshG|Josh |Talk]] 05:55, Nov 5, 2004 (UTC)
Sort of like what i was going to do...but better! -Litefantastic 15:32, 5 Nov 2004 (UTC)
Objection #8: The picture is supposed to be the Shikon no Tama, Jewel of Four Souls, which is the ultimate goal in the collect the pieces plot aspect of the show. It isn't actually from the show; one of the people here drew it. And I wouldn't say it contributes nothing; it's actually a pretty good picture. -Litefantastic 12:19, 4 Nov 2004 (UTC)
It might mean something to fans, but to me it's just a purple circle with radial shading: a minute's work in Photoshop. Gdr 12:47, 2004 Nov 4 (UTC)
I am disappointed that you do not think my jewel picture is complex enough. I know it's just a circle with a radial gradient, but I thought that it looked pretty similar to the jewel in the anime series. Improvement is always a good thing, though. Would it be better if I drew in a necklace around it? Or do you just think that there should not be a picture of the jewel in the main article? [[User:JoshG|Josh | Talk]] 23:23, Nov 4, 2004 (UTC)
I agree with Gdr that it's simple, but simply doesn't = bad. I think that what you've done is probably the best you can do. If we really must have something better we can scrounge up a screenshot of the wretched thing. -Litefantastic 15:32, 5 Nov 2004 (UTC)
It's not a question of whether the picture is simple or complex, that doesn't really matter. It's a question of whether the picture adds value to article for the general reader. Does the picture help the general reader understand the subject of the article? A frame from the manga would illustrate Takahashi's style (and if accompanied by criticism would count as fair use). But the purple circle is someone's idea of what the object in question looks like: it's an opinion, a point of view. So like any other opinion in the article, you need to justify its inclusion and attribute it. Gdr 23:52, 2004 Nov 5 (UTC)
If you think that a screenshot would be more appropriate, I have one that would work. However, the reason that I made a picture instead of using a screenshot in the first place is because I thought it would help avoid copyright concerns. [[User:JoshG|Josh | Talk]] 01:04, Nov 6, 2004 (UTC)
It's not the picture itself, it's what you do with it. Present it as the subject of analysis or criticism and it counts as fair use, use it purely as an illustration and it doesn't. In any case, the picture isn't a big deal. The main problem is that the article is not yet encyclopedic. It's a guide for fans. See my objections above. Gdr 01:07, 2004 Nov 7 (UTC)
Considering the entire plot revolves around recovering the jewel, I think a picture of it would be pretty important, yesno? -Litefantastic 03:10, 7 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Formula One[edit]

Quite complete, well-written, and intuitively organized. It is somewhat of a self-nomination, though I am not by any means its primary contributor. Rdsmith4Dan | Talk 03:33, 26 Oct 2004 (UTC)

Previously nominated and rejected twice, the last nomination was in September. When renominating, it is probably useful to specify if and how previous criticism has been addressed in the meantime. -- [[User:Solitude|Solitude\talk]] 09:36, Oct 26, 2004 (UTC)
It was already mentioned on Bernie Ecclestone, but I've added a paragraph under the "Future of Formula One" section regarding future races, including those whose future is in doubt, and a few new ones which are due to appear in the next few years. Rdsmith4Dan | Talk 22:30, 26 Oct 2004 (UTC)


Treaty establishing a constitution for Europe[edit]

Self-nomination (sort of). This article is the product of an initial detailed structure by myself followed by and a great deal of work by a number of people with expertise in EU politics. It's attracted lots of discussion on the talk page, all of which has been resolved amicably and led to substantial improvements, and has also prompted some recent comments saying how good it is! Structure is clear and it's also very topical. Toby W 11:24, 30 Oct 2004 (UTC)

Thanks for the hints. 1) I agree about the bold face. 2) The Reaction section could do with a balancing quote from another source (but I understand Rifkin is a major figure in British pro-EU politics). 3) The bullet list strikes me as more of a structural simplification than an indication of terseness, but I'll look at which points need expanding. 4) Sorry, I don't understand what you mean; it's about the EU constitutional treaty, whose official title is the title of the article, and whose contents are described in the body of the article. 5) Noted. Cheers Toby W 11:43, 30 Oct 2004 (UTC)
I've now made these changes, except for the Rifkin quote, which I'll bring up on the talk page. Toby W
Using the official title is the only NPOV option. Your suggestion flies against those who do consider it a constitution for Europe (i.e. for all Europe to eventually be party to it) zoney talk 12:39, 3 Nov 2004 (UTC)
The title was originally something like European Union constitutional treaty 2004, but it was agreed to change it to the correct title of the document itself. As for the references, you're right - because most of the claims come directly from the treaty itself. I'll move the link to that treaty into the references section. Thanks. Toby W
Some would call that original research. I will have a look at the discussion about the title change, and see if that resolves my objection. — David Remahl 14:20, 30 Oct 2004 (UTC)
I'm sorry, but I can't find the discussion about the article title. Not on the talk page, nor in its history. At the very least, I suggest moving the article to Treaty establishing a constitution for Europe, 2004, on the same format as the numerous Treaty of Londons. A redirect from the current location would be appropriate. — David Remahl 14:29, 30 Oct 2004 (UTC)
There is no cause for you to lead a one man crusade against a title you have issues with. Evidently it is not an outrageous title, or there would be a greater outcry against it. zoney talk 12:41, 3 Nov 2004 (UTC)


Bicycle[edit]

re-nom. this has now been fully overhauled, specifically re wikifying, captioning, and rewriting and annotating external links as suggested. still trying to stay a step ahead of the vandals. thanks. Sfahey 19:26, 28 Oct 2004 (UTC)

  • yes, i wrote them down. the archived objections at the footnote were way before my time on the article. mine were mostly wiki errors. i'll look it up and send it to your home page.Sfahey 23:23, 28 Oct 2004 (UTC)
this has been retooled, specifically re what keeps a bike up, and efficiency. srf

** Further to this: There is a reference to European bicycles having "fenders" as a long standing European cyclist and (native English speaker) I have never heard of such devices in connection with bicycles.

good idea. someone added this this week.
addressed.Sfahey 17:20, 3 Nov 2004 (UTC)
addresed.Sfahey 17:20, 3 Nov 2004 (UTC)
addressed,10/28. srf

"Refer to peer review" It remains my view that this nomination is premature. --Sf 11:50, 3 Nov 2004 (UTC)

I disagree strongly. Currently there are 5 "support" votes plus me, including those from knowledgeable people who are very complimentary, and 2 "objects", one of which appears to be related to the lead picture. This article reads well, is comprehensive and, based on a visit to the library where I read Enc. Brittanica's seven column entry on the same topic for the first time yesterday, remarkably accurately recounts the bicycle's history as well. I believe that most if not all of sf's objections (which btw have been improperly entered on this page as if they were separate votes) have been addressed and should be stricken, along with the word "object" atop them.Sfahey 16:42, 3 Nov 2004 (UTC)
More specifically, its a good length, covers many aspects of bikes and cycling, nicely balanced sections, good linkage/reference at the bottom of different bike topics, full references, well illustrated, and the Main article: Bicycle frame construction helps keep that section from overwhelming the rest of the article. Niteowlneils 05:50, 4 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Sgt. Pepper's Lonely Hearts Club Band[edit]

This is the current album of the Featured Album Project. More than a dozen editors have worked on it in the past couple days to make it ready for nomination and in line with WikiProject Albums standards. Tuf-Kat 15:39, Oct 26, 2004 (UTC)

Oppose It just doesn't seem very well written at the moment. Don't mean to be harsh, but the language needs a lot of improvement. Immediate observations are:
1.'The album also launching what we know today as the Classic Rock radio format.' The sentence doesn't make sense. Do we know it as the Classic Rock radio format, or do just some Americans? (I've never heard of the term.) Why did this album launch that format and not other bands of the era?
Removed.
2.'is often called' Weasel words, who does the calling?
That's credited in the intro to Rolling Stone, and that is all that is need for the first paragraph. Others are mentioned elsewhere, such as in the section entitled "critical reception" and in the infobox.
Perhaps just quote Rolling Stone if the other critics aren't going to be named there.
There's no nice terse quotable phrase from the review that says it, unfortunately. It's really not necessary for the first paragraph. The goal of the intro is to get the most important facts across, and one of the most important facts is that Sgt. Pepper's is more critically acclaimed than most any other album, with Rolling Stone being given as an example. I don't think there's any need for a quote there -- if someone wants to know the details, there's a link to the review just a few inches down in the infobox.
3.'is sometimes described' These are weasel words.
Removed.
4.'titular song' What's wrong with 'title song'?
I think of a "title song" as applying specifically to the titular song of a movie or musical, not a song with the same title as the album it was released on. In any case, "titular song" is perfectly acceptable English.
Acceptable, but unusual. Titular in that sense is listed in dictionaries as the fourth meaning of the word. May be better to describe it as the "first" song anyway. "First" imparts information, "titular" or "title" are tautologous (anyone can see that a song called "Sgt Pepper" is the same as the album title:) )
The most precise word would be eponymous, I think, but that's a bit obscure for the intro. Reworded a bit: One song, "Sgt. Pepper's Lonely Hearts Club Band", appears twice in slightly modified forms at the beginning and end, giving an overall theme to the album.
5.', in slightly modified forms,' Don't need commas around this phrase.
Reworded.
6.'In addition, several songs are cross-faded into one another, or joined by sound effects and unusual transitional elements.' Unclear sentence. What does 'cross-faded' mean? What are 'unusual transitional elements'? Why 'several songs' (I thought it was the whole A side and the whole B side)?
Reworded, may be more clear now. I'm not sure which songs are cross-faded, but I don't think there's any pattern to it. Don't have a copy to check right now.
7.'The duplication of "Sgt Pepper's Lonely Hearts Club Band" was produced to create the illusion that the recording was a concert performance by the resident band of the aforementioned club, which was Paul McCartney's original idea for the record.' Unnecessary complicated sentence. No need for long words like 'duplication' and 'aforementioned'. 'Reprise' would be better than 'duplication', 'by a resident band' would be better than 'by the resident band of the aforementioned club'.
Second part reworded. First part not touched -- though long, duplication is a frequently used and commonly understood word. Reprise is shorter but less commonly used, and I think, less commonly understood. In addition, I believe a song can only be reprised if it is identical both times, though I could be wrong.
Could go with "repeated" (with rephrasing). The song is identified as "Sgt Pepper's Lonely Hearts Club Band (Reprise)" on the sleeve. And you're wrong, it doesn't have to be identical, it can be a shortened (and slightly modified) version of the original.
Changed to Repeating the first song at the end of the entire album helped establish the illusion that the recording
8.'The Beatles had grown tired of touring and had quit the road in late 1966, burned out after the dramas of the "Bigger than Jesus" controversy (with its resultant deaths threats and record burnings in the United States, due to the widespread disapproval of this message from the Beatles) and the tumultuous tour of the Phillipines which saw them virtually frog-marched out of the country at gunpoint.' Very long sentence of little relevance to the album.
Long sentence shorted, but of great relevance. It explains why they retired from touring during recording, and the importance of this is the point of the next paragraph.
9.'an effectively unlimited period'; 'virtually unlimited access' Don't know who used a thesaurus (badly) on this article, but it doesn't have many synonyms for 'unlimited'.
Reworded.
10.Still slightly unsure on this one, but changed enough for me to remove it. 'one of their greatest strengths as a recording unit was drummer Ringo Starr, who was highly creative, stylistically adaptable and extremely reliable, rarely needing more than one take. In fact, in their entire recorded archive, there are fewer than twenty major takes that break down because of a mistake by Ringo.' Do we need a puff piece for Ringo?
Toned down somewhat. I don't see the problem with it. The paragraph says that the Beatles were efficient in the studio, then mentions an author who pointed specifically to Ringo as being especially efficient. This seems appropriate to me, but I have removed the bit about Ringo only failing a take twenty times in their career, as that should be in his article, not here.
11.'By the time they came to record the album, The Beatles' musical interests and abilities...' I didn't realise that 'musical interests and abilities' could record albums.
The entire sentence was By the time they came to record the album, The Beatles' musical interests and abilities had grown enormously from their simple pop beginnings. Its been re-worded slightly, but your interpretation is mistaken -- the verb is clearly "had grown", not "record".
You miss my point. The subject of "came to record" in the opening clause is "musical interests and abilities". :)
I'm afraid I still miss it. In any case, I changed it to By the time The Beatles recorded the album, their musical interests had grown from.... Is this less confusing?
I'll stop here. I'm afraid it's just too poorly written at the moment.
Do you want me to read on now?
If you like, though if no one else votes, there will be no point as the article can't get featured.

jguk 18:39, 26 Oct 2004 (UTC)

The Simpsons[edit]

Self-nominated, I think that this is one of the reasons we have TV. The long-running series deserves to be a featured article.- B-101 11:22, 26 Oct 2004 (UTC)

Gunpowder Plot[edit]

or alternatively Guy Fawkes Both self nominations; one or other of these would be nice for the week of November 5th (or maybe just even for the day!) and it would be really outstanding if these could be in really good shape for the 400th anniversary of the Gunpowder Plot next year. Sjc 08:39, 27 Oct 2004 (UTC)

In case anyone is interested: The history section of BBC Online has a page that mentions several other people involved in the conspiracy. [[User:MacGyverMagic|Mgm|(talk)]] 19:54, Oct 27, 2004 (UTC)
Addendum: "Some scholars" argue that Macbeth is from the increased interest in evil. Who are these scholars? Also, what has that to do with this? James I of England had written a book on demonology and witchcraft, and he was known to believe that witches and demons and the devil trying to snare him. Since Shakespeare wrote for the court, a witch play makes perfect sense, especially one set in Scotland, where James was from. The connection to the Gunpowder plot is extremely weak on that basis, and, since Shakespeare was likely a Roman Catholic, I can't see his doing anything to fan the flames of the anti-Catholic mood. In fact, witch trials have a big spike in England during James I's reign, and it's reasonable to think that the people performing such trials were trying to rise politically by appealing to the King's own beliefs. As soon as James I was off the throne, witch trials fall precipitously. Geogre 13:03, 28 Oct 2004 (UTC)

Pascal's Wager[edit]

A clear, precise description of a philosophical argument, accompanied by various criticisms and interesting wiki links. I have not worked on this article. Doradus

Support provisional on references: References would be good, but web references would be enough, really, as I don't think the summaries are particularly POV or out on a limb. Support after more external references are added. Otherwise, it's a pretty fair presentation of something that people take far too seriously. Oh, a pointer to an e-text of Pensees would be a good thing, too. Geogre 00:52, 28 Oct 2004 (UTC)

B-29 Superfortress[edit]

Self nomination. I have done most of the work on the article as it exists now. It is comprehensive on the aeroplane's history from its early origins to its current operability. It has references. Its up to WikiProject Aircraft standards. It comprehensively describes all variants. It provides references. It has a comprehensive set of statistics. It certainly deserves it. Iñgólemo←• 06:09, 2004 Oct 25 (UTC)

I bet ‘Enola Gay’ with (those kind of) quotes is against all the naming conventions. I'd write it Enola Gay. Anyway, those names are just a minor issue, so support. --ZeroOne 06:16, 25 Oct 2004 (UTC)

5) The "Units Using the B-29" section should be converted in a table mentioning more information (numbers used, f.e.), or be merged with the operational history. As it stands, this section is hardly useful. The use by the RAF is not mentioned elsewhere in the article. 6) The two footers seem partially overlapping, and some of them should be listed as categories. 7) The references seem incomplete. None of the mentioned sites seems to have the version history (for example), so additional sources must have been used. Please list them. There must also have been written books about the Superfortress. If you know of any, please list them (if only as further reading). 8) I'm curious about the name Superfortress; was it derived from the B-17? Did Boeing dub it thus, or did pilots name it such? The name isn't mentioned anywhere in the article save the captions - this really should be discussed. 9) The article could really use some additional photographs. (Not an objection) Jeronimo 06:57, 25 Oct 2004 (UTC)

Response to 1)I noted the comment on the blue data table, and I figured I'd give it a trial deletion. Another user reverted it in less than two minutes. The blue data table is no longer the format endorsed by WikiProject Aircraft, but after a debate on the system to be used in the new format, it was agreed to leave the data table as it stands in the articles that use the blue data table. 2) Do you mean, literally link 22 m as to metre, in the form 22m?WP:MOS suggests that the convention would be to link it to 1 E1 m. 3) Some statistics just aren't provided in any of the material we have come across. The reason rate of climb (900 ft/min) isn't provided in the blue data table is because it's provided in the statistics subsection. Since that subsection is the current endorsed format for statistics, the blue table hasn't been used to add new information for some time. 5) The recommendations are not within the standard formatting endorsed by WikiProject Aircraft; the section as it stands is. 6) I respectfully disagree about the footers being overlapping. As to listing them as categories, I don't think that that is a problem with the article, so much as it is with the titles of those lists that it links to. 7) I can look for other sites, but the references are as I found them, with the addition of those I used. The version history is compiled from each of the 25 articles the [USAF Museum] has on each of the 20+ listed variants. I'll work on the references 8) I'm not sure about the name. None of the references describe it. The only thing I know is the conjecture I have that it is related to its rôle as successor of the Flying Fortress. The reason Superfortress is never used in the article is because convention is to refer to it as the B-29, not the Superfortress. 9) Believe it or not, public domain images are hard to come by. Iñgólemo←• 02:39, 2004 Oct 26 (UTC)
1) I think duplication is bad in this case, since there are essentially two tables (it would be OK if some of the facts were mentioned in normal prose text, though). Either drop the sidetable or the bottom table. One of the requirements for a FA is that the article should conform to any applicable WikiProjects. If that says use the bottom table, you should lose the sidetable. (I would personally prefer the sidetable, though, the bottom one is very ugly). 2) I intended your first suggestion. 3) Another reason to drop one of the tables. This is just plain confusing and ugly. 5) If you want to feature this article, the section needs to get more content, or be removed. WikiProjects are important, but it is impossible to fit every topic in a tight harnass. If there is nothing more to be said than just this, it doesn't deserve a section for this article. I think that should be acceptable for the WikiProject, too. 7) There have previously been problems with footers, and I don't really care for them, but others may complain about them. 8) I think it would be interesting to add if you can find it anywhere. Not vital, though. Jeronimo 17:40, 27 Oct 2004 (UTC)
Article now has ten external links and two book references. Iñgólemo←• 23:45, 2004 Nov 2 (UTC)

Optigan[edit]

Another self-nomination. I've had one of these, uh, organs quite literally from the age of twelve. I learned to play piano by ear thanks in part to the thing! - Lucky 6.9 04:41, 25 Oct 2004 (UTC)

Linking would also be good, although having the samples local would be better (other sites will change). The photos are "bearable", but should be improved when possible. However, I'll maintain my objection awaiting sound samples and references. Jeronimo 11:16, 29 Oct 2004 (UTC)

Jesus[edit]

Very good article. [[User:Neutrality|Neutrality (hopefully!)]] 03:42, Oct 24, 2004 (UTC)


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